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In a list
A contest entry
- The Shape of Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended July 30, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very nice haiku, I see you have taken Polly's advice. It looks wonderful written in the shape form, thank you so much for your entry.
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This is a very good rewrite. Great job.
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Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck.
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This is an interesting haiku with a very nice aha moment at the end. Do you think there is a way to get the same image across without using two ing words? Just a thought. -
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So cleverly penned, I think this style adds texture to your penning and accents the visual you paint with words...excellent work
my pleasure to read ~tia
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an amazing image out of five words. wonderful!!
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this is awsome. i might have to give this style of poem a go. you do it so brilliantly and wonderfully. well done and good luck
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I suggest you take the AP class taught by Lotus of Lakshmi, its a great lesson on how to write true Haiku.
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All of your brilliant haikus inspired me to write one of my own. You are very good at these.
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Haiku is just a moment in time, captured, suspended for all to see. I am taking the Haiku class here at AP. It has opened my eyes to the true meaning and form of the art...Scott
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