r u n n i n g children
laughter
and screams
head
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In a list
A contest entry
- The Shape of Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended July 30, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I can certainly understand. I am a naturally low-energy person, so although I don't hate children (and actually now look forward to possibly raising my own), I was never able to handle kids growing up... just get them hyper, and I'm ready to give up after just a few minutes...
I hope I have mellow kids.
Great haiku! Congrats on your trophy!
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The joys of motherhood, intensified by summer vacation! This is a delightful entry and the shape you wrote it is is wonderful.
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Very good rewrite. Great job.
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Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck.
r u n n i n g children
laughing
and screaming
head
a
c
h
e
I eally like the aha moment at the end. My only concern would be the use of three ing. is there a way to show the image without using all the ing words??? -
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This was deliciously funny! I know that headache well too! ha! Wonderful work and a fun read ~tia
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I know that headache well
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this is fantastic true words written in a short poem in a wonderful and effective form and way. loved it well done
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this is fantastic! truer words were never typed! well done!!!
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