I see the sun in your eyes,
It makes me want to kiss you,
I feel it's warmth on my back,
I don't ever want to miss you.
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short and sweet. nice to put in a card maybe.
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Yea, maybe nice to put in a card but it didn't impress me very much. If I had asked for a quickie contest... it probably would have but I didnt and because it is a prewrite and there is only one relation to the picture.. the fact that there is a sun in it.. I am hardly impressed at all. Thanks for entering.. and feel free to enter a different piece. I am going to be completely honest with you, I dont think this will make the finalists. It is a lovely piece, just not at all what I was really looking for.
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Aww lovely little rhyme here...
So very true as well. I don't want to miss him, not anymore... but he will be with me soon and all should be all right then! -
LOL
Yup, short and to the point!
Yet very sweet and really cute!
GOOD LUCK!! -
woah short but all so sweet i wish u the best of luck
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