In a shallow night, drops of blossoms feathering
From a full moon light down to the gloom rough
Sharpening our tears by the loss of our gathering
From our hazy moment towards the dizzy laughs
But death whipped us remorseless and swept sensations
In a way I saw your smile and welted it by deceptions
A remembrance of your enthusiasm dethroned vibrations
But I know akin the red rain heavenly your spirit goes
And within my heart memories thrash chanting a prose
I値l gather the roses of your afterlife
I値l blather the causes of your death
I値l live by you,
I値l dream by you,
Until I値l join you.
Author notes
option number two, well in fact i felt somehow that this poem fits the most, for this option since i couldn't
feel other these world to define it.
A contest entry
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I like this
excellent woridng,my fave line is "sharpening our tears by the loss of our gathering" very nica...good metephore! -
This is a sweet poem, which option in my contest is it?
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this poem is very touching thank you for entering my contest and i wish u all the best. xXx
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Beautiful
What a powerfully amazing poem but please put the option you choose and why you chose it in your author's box. Thank you and good luck-Damien
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This is very good. Are you a very spiritual type person?
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hell i am...still not the standard type and usual template thoughts..thks for the comment
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I can't fathom how much you struggled with this feeling. Your words have weaved a complex picture, and that takes talent.
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missed me? this was a wonderful one so so so deep and touchy wow!!! wayna el poem yalle wa3aditne fiya?
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I’ll gather the roses of your afterlife
I’ll blather the causes of your death
I’ll live by you,
I’ll dream by you,
Until I’ll join you.
how marvellous my friend, so sensationnal, its sad yet so damn romantic, exellent job.
peace
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that's sooo true, that's how i felt about - that's how i wrote. i thank you
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Oh so lovely! A precious dedication and promise. Thank you for your entry! Beat of luck in the contest!
Peace,
Azlyn
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that's you karismatic look.
wishing you good luck in this contest. wihsing that to me too
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