Wind wears wanton
y e a r s
writhe
in between each gust good
bloom- thrive, the wind
q u i t.
A contest entry
- The Shape of Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended July 30, 2007, 41 entries
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I think I may get it according to what you said to the person below me, but after reading that I like the way it is put.
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Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck. I am sorry but I do not get the meaning or the drift of this haiku at all. I can not make sense out of any of it. Maybe I am missing the obvious.
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Quit and years are expanded because I wish to emphasize how years drag on, the flower attempts to quit but like most things which burden you, they burden for a long time.
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I'm not really sure I understand the deal with the spacing of the two words....I suppose it just adds a sort of balance to the rest of the poem. This seems like a thrust and pull type of thing..."in between each gust good bloom-thrive" and then "the wind quit" really interesting concept of a sort of battle of good vs evil and a mini, pausing retreat. I like it...and i also like the personification of the wind as well. of course, i am a sucker for personified poetry. good write.
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