flutt'ring on the line multi coloured clothes
signal detergent's success
A contest entry
- The Shape of Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended July 30, 2007, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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flutt'ring on the line multi coloured clothes
signal detergent's success
I like the haiku, you have painted a very nice picture with the first line. Is this a rewrite of one that I had commented on before? -
This is very good, the L1 definitiely is the clothes on the line. This is a good way to present your haiku!
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Cool piece. I never thought I would find a haiku about the clothes drying on a clothes line; the images are easily understandable, and very easy to relate to, a signal of the detergents success was a good idea too. Good luck in the contest.
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