wild wind
whistling
wig w
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In a list
A contest entry
- The Shape of Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended July 30, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Your haiku has a wonderful AHA moment, a little more gust and something might blow away. Thank you so much for your entry.
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I've heard of wavy hair, but you brought such a cute and comic sense of that image with this haiku. Love the alliteration.
Great job and best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo
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Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck.
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wild, whistling
wig w
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Very nice haiku and a great concrete poem. My only comment is; Do you think maybe it should read:
wild wind
in stead of
wind wild
Just a thought that you can ponder. -
Same idea as your previous haiku, but a different twist, I like this one a bit more as its a bit more visually noticable. Good job again, still with the alliteration, the images here are good too. Best of luck in the contest.
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Good alliteration, always love that. I also love the decision you made to keep wig waving down at the bottom of the page, so as to designate a space between where the wind wild, whistling might begin, and where this even occurred. Pretty cool indeed. Good luck in this contest, I hope everything goes well.
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