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slight wait
on a leaf
tip
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the
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penultimate
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raindrop
A contest entry
- The Shape of Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended July 30, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is a very cool concrete haiku, you have made such a good choice of words, the meaning (s) are easy to understand. Thank you so much for your entry.
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You've really captured an essence of haiku artistry by lay-out and words to this haiku, Alan...Right down to that little "." detail.
Jo
P.S.: I think "penultimate" is now my new most favorite word, and you used it PERFECTLY for this haiku.
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an excellent entry in this contest ... the shape of your haiku faithfully reflects its appealing content ...
a masterpiece ...
maa
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Nice concrete shape on this one, a pleasure for the eyes and mind.
Dennis
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Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck.
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slight wait
on a leaf
tip
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the
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penultimate
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raindrop
This is very nice haiku and also a very good concret poem. I think you have captured the essense of this contest with this one. -
Beautiful shape and your Haiku has such lovely imagery ... much like this! good luck in the contest and all the best to you~
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That's what I call weighting the edge, and on the edge of something I feel, like facing these judgement on a regular basis, such is life, good job,
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How Wonderful!
Great capture of the shape in your haiku! And lovely wording too!
Good Luck in the contest!
Tang
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Good shape poem, what about the use of "penultimate", isn't it more telling than showing?
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A micro revelation. Good.
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Very cool haiku, I appreciate the idea of the period representing a drop of rain, at that the last drop of rain, the last one standing erhem hanging, cool idea, the title suites it quite well. Nice wordchoice by the way with penultimate, I got a kick out of seeing that word in haiku, such a large word, and in most other cases it would almost seem out of place, you found a way to make it fit, good job. Good luck in the contest.
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