love lost
a
new
day
love found
Author notes
did anyone turn in a love? i left one here yesterday
A contest entry
- The Shape of Haiku by azure85.
790 points, ended July 30, 2007, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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(I think it is all right, Polly)
I do like this haiku also, I like the concept of a new day, and a new love found. Thank you for your entry. -
Thank you for entering our workshop/contest, "The Shape of the Haiku." Good luck.
love lost
a
new
day
love found
I am not really sure if this haiku complies with the rules or not. I will let Susie decide on that one. My concern is with rule 3.
3. captures no more than two simultaneous moments
But I really like this concept for a haiku. -
No but I found one and loved it and kept it for my own till it flew away .
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Good piece. That is how it can be, but perhaps that new love found was an old love unrequited until you had a chance to pay attention to the blossom which had bloomed into a lustful gardenia awaiting your touch, to pull it from the concrete street which it grew malnourshed and plant it into your heart where you could grow with it. ^ A bit over top and analytical? Well nonetheless cool piece! Good luck in the contest.
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Thx for your comment
Not over the top ... as a matter of fact, I have had this experience ... under the bottom ...
found
true love
picked
a
rose
poison petals
killed me
poet43
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