I dare not close my eyes too tight,
hopes, dreams adrift in flight.
In darkness all alone am I,
farewell to love, goodbye.
Cobwebs hanging from end to end,
what lies beyond the bend?
A summer breeze to sweep them free,
will sorrow bury me?
Deafening silence fills my ears,
overshadowed with fears.
No thoughts of love nor to speak,
it is relief I seek.
To stop these eyes that daily weep,
painful thoughts, shadows creep.
What once was light, now darkness dwells,
mid demons casting spells.
We hurt most when loved ones leave.
seek solace as we grieve.
Strike of midnight too much to bear.
grief stricken laden here
Death would be sweeter, free from pain,
but on earth I shall remain.
Till God looks down on me with pity,
takes me to His Golden City.
Author notes
I was given the word- Overshadow
In a list
A contest entry
- Pick a Number (Invitation) by Silent Cougar.
600 points, ended July 26, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow this is wonderful, amazing actually very very well done to you love. a well earned gold here for sure
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Definately worthy!
This was absolutely a beautifully penned piece. Wonderful show of emotion. I could feel your pain and sorrow, your sadness. This was worthy of the gold poet, and deserving of recognition.
Thanks for sharing, may have many more blessed days.
Tory
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Thats life !
Oh yes- but to know no pain is not to know the value of love. You express so well how I have felt a few times, sometimes the hertbreak of love stinks
BD
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The sheer force of this is absolutely mesmerizing...
Sandy, this is a lovely piece, overflowing with beauty; such delicate imagery portraying tender feelings of sorrow... I believe this to be one of the best poems I've seen in a long time. Best of luck to you in this contest!!! Peace and Love, Cyn
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Quite simply delightful my dear friend, i see through the eyes of this pain with your words ,it is a poem with great impact and meaning and a terrific writer
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Great Comment
Hello my friend. So nice to read your comment. I do write this from my heart. I know no other way to write.
You honor me with such nice words. Thank you. I hope all is well with you. Take care, Sandy
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lovely!
this was amazing , i have a lot of demons to fight off, some more ... real than others if that makes sense. but this poem reminded of them, especially the first stanza. this seemed to be a bit darker tham most of your poetry, but its very nice to see a different side of you. i enjoyed reading it very much! the flow was nice and sready, a beautiful writing. thank you for sharing this with us aunt sandy. take care, hope to talk to you soon. god bless.
Kelcey
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Very Heartfelt Comment!!!
Thank you Kelcey. Yes life is hard some times but I have my faith to try and get through. Some nights are worse then others. I do the best I can. You can feel so alone at 2 in the morning. Thats when I pray. God Bless you. You take care, Aunt Sandy
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Sandy, my dear Sis and friend. I know where this one came from, and to be honest, when you chose the number, the prompt word sort of made me wonder should I change it. But, I didn't, and I'm glad I refrained. You have produced an excellent piece here, full of a different style I haven't seen. the lineage sort of threw me off at first, but then I got the swing of it, and read it again. it is without dubt, a top class write, and will bring many wonderous feelings to all who read it.
Thank you Sandy.
you have a heart filled with pure love.
thank you for entering.
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Lovely Comment
Oh Mikle, You words are so sweet and caring. That is so like you to be concerned. Thank you for all you do for me as a wonderful friend who is always there when I need him. Bless you always. Sandy
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They say one gets better with age
I was not talking about sex in case you were wondering writing silly better at writing one could say you are getting most interesting in your writing. mac
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Smiling Hewre My Friend
Good evening Mac. Your comments are always so happy and make me smile. I can always count on you when I need one. You take care. This comment is worth 3 quaerts of milk. Specially delivered.for you.
Take care, Sandy
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I think, your work is absolutely great and interesting. I like when people take part in the contests and have to write something particularly special, at the same time without loosing the sense, feelings, thoughts and words. I like when they combine everything in a whole piece.
In my opinion, your title is fantastic. It easily catch one's eyes and it is 'opened' by the poem itself. I think, this is the main point, and you are absolutely great!
Interesting picture that adds some effects to your work.
Very interesting!
~G.J~
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Wonderful Comment!!!
Such a lovely comment you have written. I appreciate you stopping by.Thank you!!!re, Sandy
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I think you did a terrific job with this poem! It is so full of emotions. Sadness,longing,lost love and sorrow. Powerful!
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Very Nice Comment
Hello Rob, How is one of my favorite poets? Thank you for stopping by. Always so nice when you do. Hugs and Smiles dear friend. You take care. Blessings!!! Sandy
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i love how this flowed right together. there is so much unspoken feelings that ...WOW. i can relate to this piece and i'm not really sure how. thanks for sharing this. good luck in the contest.
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Great Comment!!!
Your comment was so nice. Thank you. I do appreciate it. Take care, Sandy
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You are most welcome.
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Nice little write, very heartfelt and sad. The flow and meter of this poem are good and you can hear it rhythmically in your head. Thanks for sharing this write.
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Nice Comment
Hello, Thank you for the lovely comment. Take care, Sandy
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Outstanding write..Very powerful...I adore this piece..as well as the photo you have chosen to use..
Hauntingly Beautiful, indeed..This will of course be placed in my favorites..thank you..smiles
Best wishes with this entry..
Bravo..
Peace
~A~
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Thank You!!!
Great comment. It is most appreciated. Take care, Sandy
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I think it should be 'When Shadows Call' but that is only my opinion. This is a beautiful and haunting poem and you must be pleased with the outcome. It really is very fantastic.
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Lovely Comment
Thank you franky. This was a lovely comment. Thank you for stopping by. Take care, Sandy
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SO LOVELY!!!!!
We will always miss our loved ones but their sweet and loving memories will forever stay with us and be with us through all we may experience.
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Lovely My Friend!!!
Hi Kevin. Your comment is so nice and heartfelt!!! I hung some of the pictures you sent. Such beautiful scenes of nature. Thank you again. You are a wonderful and understanding friend. You take care, Sandy
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