Hello there Reaper, have you come for me today?
"I'm here to take you, and carry you away."
Why can't I stay.. Just a bit longer?
"Because of my pain, I am stronger."
Oh my Reaper, why do you hate me?
"Follow me, and you shall see."
I need to stay! I won't leave things unfinished.
"I'm sorry to say, your record is blemished"
"I'm taking you away, You have to atone."
But my life is great! Just let me alone!
Oh my Reaper, why do you hate me?
"Follow me my child, and you shall see."
Where are we going? I'm afraid of the dark.
"It's not so bleak, we need to start."
"We'll walk all night, and sleep all day."
But I don't think this is the right way!
Oh my Reaper, why do you hate me?
"Follow me my dear, and you shall see"
"Take my hand, we will go."
I want my life back, I want you to know!
I don't want to go... I want to live.
"You'll take my hand, you have nothing to give."
Oh my Reaper, Why do you hate me?
"Follow me my love, and you shall see."
"My name is death, as you all know,
so take my hand, and we will go.
"My name is death, and we will see...
Everything you're meant to be.
"You want to live.. yet all must die,
We'll walk some more, please don't cry."
Oh my Reaper, why do you hate me?
"Follow me my dear, and you shall see."
I want to go, yet I must stay.
"Please don't make me take you away."
Just let me go, nothing will change!
"But life without you.. It's just too strange.."
Oh my Reaper, why do you hate me?
"Without you my dear, life is nothing to me."
"I'll let you go... but you must say,
You'll love me forever.. never forget me one day."
You're taking me back? But will you survive?
"I know not yet, for I'm not alive."
Oh my Reaper, why do you love me?
"Because you're my soul, you are everything"
"And so I free you, so there is no more pain."
"But as I fear to lose you, I have nothing to gain."
"I forgive your transgression, and realease all my pain."
"But as I fear to lose you, I am going insane.."
Author notes
Well, here's another one.. I must be one depressing person
A contest entry
- *POW* = Poem of the Week ~* by Arkbear.
500 points, ended July 16, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This was SO good!! I have a poem about the reaper too lol you should check it out Its Called "Death" But this was amazing!!
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nice. that was... wow. i havnt read anything that descriptive in a while
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i love the format of this, the speech , question/answer style...i think though that this could benefit from tightening up the rhythm a little bit...one verse for me was spot-on rhythm wise but a few lines were off i think...
"I need to stay! I won't leave things unfinished.
"I'm sorry to say, your record is blemished"
"I'm taking you away, You have to atone."
But my life is great! Just let me alone!"
- thats the verse i was talking about, i think this is one of the best because the rhythm and rhyme come much more smoothly than anywhere else....
*oooh i've just re read and the last verse is not only rhymically lovely but also an amazing stanza!! thats my favourite!!
take care xxx
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Jar you are definitely good enough to be published. You should consider putting a manuscript together. Seriously. I love this! You're really creative! ... it's very deep. :} ~ Kerri
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Oh wow, didn't expect that. So pretty. For real Jared. I liked this one a lot.
It twisted and being it's so early in the morn for me, i didn't see it coming. haha! But seriously, great job. I liked it.
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this is really awesome. great write. im off to read more now!
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oh my
jared....u have major talent bub...yupp...one of meh favorites of all time.
besides poe..
watch out kidds...this guy will be famous one day...wait and see
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i love this one. ur not too depressing because then u'd be writing about killing urself instead of wanting to stay alive. i have to agree with every1 else, this is the best one that i've seen on AP so far. good job.
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This was a nice piece.Very dark yet inspiring.
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Thank's. I appreciate it.
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That was one of the coolest poems i have seen on here
seriously naomi to this poem
Lets fuck
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thank you very much. when do you wanna? Right now?! I'm down for that, come get me whore, and we'll screw!
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I see you took some of it out! But still I love it! It's still one of the best poems I've read on AP! Great write!
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I really liked this one! It flowed so perfectly! I love how it goes full circle and switches around! This piece really is amazing! Great write! In line 28 tho...I think 'ment' should be 'Meant'
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Thank you! I didn't even see that ^.^ I changed it
Thank you for the comment.
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