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A mouth full of nothing

an open mouth:
syllables slip,
fragmented and sharp

pointed tongues
sting of exclamations !!!
that leave question marks ???

where harsh words
forgot to

filter

through the heart

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Written in about 5 minutes for a quickie contest....

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  • marc creamore
    November 11, 2007

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    This piece is spoken from a soul that has delved deeply into the heart of compassion and UNDERSTOOD!


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    July 16, 2007
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    The heart is real and the mind exists only to serve and protect it. When the heart is removed from the loop, pain sets in and as a poet/writer said, "Pain is God's loudspeaker to a deaf world." First Things First, or the resovoir of the heart shall burst.

  • Oya Ayaba Nikua
    July 15, 2007
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    Very cool.


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 14, 2007

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    "an open mouth:
    syllables slip,
    fragmented and sharp"

    An impressive, quick penning, my Friend. I hope you did well in the contest, Sweetie. Wanda


    • Lyrical Soul silver member
      July 14, 2007
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      Thanks. Didn't even bring an HM but that's ok. I'm going to work on this one I think. There may be some potential here

      (trying to rate your comment but it won't let me)


  • Nicolette gold member
    July 14, 2007

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    Wonderful poetry and written in 5 min - wow!! I so love the concept here - the heart is indeed the best filter there is. Loved this one!

    ~ Nicolette


    • Lyrical Soul silver member
      July 14, 2007
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      Thank you my friend. I will be working on this one. I like the concept too but just didn't have enough time to really work on it. Any suggestion? I could use your help on this one


  • leo2
    July 14, 2007

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    No wonder the Egyptians removed the brains from their mummies. All you need in the afterlife and in this life is Heart. Best of luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • tara wilson gold member
    July 14, 2007

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    "where harsh words
    forgot to

    filter

    through the heart" Excellent
    The exclamation and question part is very creative...love this one, good luck!


  • suseann
    July 14, 2007

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    The occasional slip of the tongue happens. But most all are forgiven if no real harm was intended. Great piece. Reflects compassions in thought of filtering words through the heart first.


  • thepoetssoul
    July 14, 2007

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    Wonderful Job
    Great Job with my prompt
    Good luck in the contest
    Thank you for entering


  • Rowan gold member
    July 13, 2007

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    Yup, speaking without a heart-filter..bad.
    but this sure isn't..excellent thought, and poem.
    I really liked this.

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