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Burning bridges scream serenades

    to apathetic ghosts.

 Stabbing quills into dry veins

      to leach one more unfelt tear

 onto sympathetic shoulders,

    spilling secrets to mix amongst

  turned earth and plastic flowers;

    rotted wood falls apart again.

 

Melodies not nearly macabre enough

   fall though a thousand kneeling sinners

 praying for sorrow unbound

    to tell fictional fantasies

 their stitched up tongues can't weave,

   when they've swallowed so many

         eulogies of whispers forgotten.

 

Revulsion on the lips

   for flat marionettes,

 with murderous masters

     and unconcerned eyes,

 as they go through the disgusting

   motions of desecrating the memory.

Author notes

Funerals disgust me.
I wouldn't mind them so much if the people weren't there. I suppose I should rephrase then; PEOPLE at funerals disgust me.

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  • Carpe Noctem
    December 20, 2007

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    Wow, I never quite looked at it that way. Very good use of words and strong emotion. I haven't been to maqny funerals myself, just of my grandfathers and three of my good friends. I always left angry because people were there that definitely shouldn't have been there. Thanks for entering, and best of luck!


  • Taxing Minds
    July 27, 2007

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    What a fantastic write. I loved it and each word was so well positioned. One of the best in my contest thus far I would say


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    July 24, 2007

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    I agree, I get a little creeped at funerals as well. Like the way the title went into this. Epilogue, being the end, being a funeral, the end of life. Quite clever really. I loved your imagery and choice of vocabulary, very deep and advanced and yet kept simple enough to understand and to digest. Enjoyed the read.


  • Nobody Royale silver member
    July 15, 2007

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    this is an amazing piece..once again I am dazzled by your turn of phrases and imagery...well done my dear


  • parasol
    July 15, 2007

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    This is pure brilliance! I’m in awe... It’s very beautifully written. So powerful and speaks from so much profundity. I loved the metaphors and use of alliteration. This was extremely creative and the imagery was darkly lovely. I really liked the comparsion of an epilogue to a funeral.

    Funerals can be a bit difficult to deal with, especially when a loved one has passed away. I’ve only been to two funerals, so far... but I was very young when I attended them. But I remember, when I was approximately 12 years ago, I went to a swap meet and someone had parked a funeral vehicle (it looked like an extended black limousine) with creepy stickers of death and ghosts on it, near my parent’s car and I was scared for the whole day. I always wondered if there was a real corpse inside that car. To be honest, I didn’t quite understand why someone would drive such a car. Innocence is too short-lived.

    This poem was quite original and beautiful. Best of luck in the contest.
    - Andi


  • forbidden-colour
    July 14, 2007

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    " fall though a thousand kneeling sinners "

    Fuckk.


    Deep.
    Powerful.

    And amazing as usual.

    Love you [=
    xxxx


  • AshliiAsphyxiation
    July 14, 2007

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    you have to be my fav poet honney.. in english.. they asked us to write about our fav poet && why we like em.. it is a school holiday homework thingy.. && im gonna do it on you coz im in la la love with your writes

    xxx

    ILY


    • Exodus gold member
      July 14, 2007
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      Aww honey that's the sweestest thing anyone's ever said to me!!! ILYewwwwwwww

  • LaurenLightning--x
    July 14, 2007

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    This is amazing.
    I want to read it over and over and -over-
    The imagery and just everything and wow. Words don't make sense any more because I really can't tell you how much I love this poem.
    And the lines :

    Stabbing quills into dry veins
    to leach one more unfelt tear
    onto sympathetic shoulders

    Just. wow.
    How do you do it? All your poems are amazing.

    KetFace - Magic xX

    • Exodus gold member
      July 14, 2007
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      Aww thank you so much hun. I actually worked pretty hard on this one so I'm really glad you liked it.
      And you're a pretty freakin sweet poet yourself


  • oh willoughby
    July 13, 2007
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    wow, interesting, another perfect one!

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