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Clay

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Why cant you just except me for me?
Am I not good enough for you , just a rock in your path
Something you pick up then later throw away?

I try to be myself that’s what I’ve always been told
But to you the old ways aren’t good enough anymore.
You want me to be something like you and everyone else ,
Like a piece of clay that you can mold and twist till you think its right.

But who are you to say what is right and what isn’t?
Judge me fuck you stop playing god!

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  • christy22
    August 7, 2007

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    good poem...i like all your feelings...the last line seems hard.....not in the feeling hard but as in hard to fit it there...i read the whole thing 3 times and the last line just sticks out....not in a good wys it might fit better if you broke it up like
    "Judge me?
    fuck you!!
    stop playing god!"
    that might fit a lil better it needs those breaks of some other line....it is just hard to read....

  • L. J. Arien
    July 14, 2007
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    forgot clappies


  • L. J. Arien
    July 14, 2007
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    very nice! you're getting better, kid. ^.^

  • VampiressLunaFaerie
    July 14, 2007

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    I like this poem...everyone can relate to this so well!!! great write..wow you haven't writen in a while and when you do you throw out awsome stuff like this!!!


  • Frozentearz
    July 14, 2007

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    I like how you vented out your feelings here
    So much real life held within it, life is what it is
    and people are what they are, sometimes we just have to be the better person and turn the other way, Hard to do but worth it when you leave them thinking dam
    I didn't get to them,
    Big hugz your way
    Frozentearz

  • frankey
    July 14, 2007

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    Powerful, dark and angry but I think you have a right to be angry. People should worry more about who they are rather than try to change someone else. We can only change ourself and for sure if we do change for someone else we wont be happy with who we are and if we aren't happy neither will they be ultimately.

  • Guardian Nemesis
    July 14, 2007

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    hello Crimson great write a lot of emotion pumping out of this write
    It's not right when someone tries to break you changing you into someone you are not just be yourself it's fun smile *smiles*

    well done crimson keep it up i loved all of it

    ~GN~

    p.s if i spelt something wrong please forgive me but i can't spell

    . Rewarded 6


  • Shade Aurelia
    July 13, 2007

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    my dear
    This is angry. grrr. lol I'm just glad I'm not on your bad side.
    Love you muchly
    Shade
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