Eviscerate-
The white underbelly
Drag me out like an empty spoon,
For pleasure and damnation
Honey sweet misery-
Tastes just like rebellion...
Persuasive-
This frivolous injection
Rigid and tempting
Yet severely unimpressive
Because I am supposed to be clean,
My thighs wet with exhilaration
A thousand words,
Stolen-screaming,
A broken edge,
Twisting-pleading.
A contest entry
- Whatever Goes by AshliiAsphyxiation.
300 points, ended August 25, 2007, 52 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I wrote better than that one!!! by Tattboyspet.
800 points, ended September 28, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Almost Anything Goes by bloodletter68.
300 points, ended March 13, 2008, 132 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I enjoyed this one ... profound and yet simple - well done
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love it
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Wow...
powerful! It's sexual but far from seductive in its portrayal. The short lines allow for a brutal message to be conveyed, of an unhealthy relationship between human and intoxicant, whatever that inoxicant may be. It could be drugs, it could be a metaphor for an abusive yet pleasurable (one some level) relationship. In my opinion, anyway. I could be entirely wrong! I loved it anyways xxx -
i like this one, i love the words you used. thanx for entering, good luck
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I like this. Powerful, yet cryptic.
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