I hear the midnight train calling my name,
Telling me it can take me to a better place.
Here, it says, my happiness and I will be reunited,
And hearing those words allow for a flame to be ignited.
I board the train in eager anticipation,
Asking if it can travel back in time.
Close your eyes child, tell me the place in your mind.
And as my eyelids shut I describe to him my destination.
Take me to a place where there are no goodbyes.
Take me where sadness and pain do not exist.
Take me, train, to a place where families are happy,
And children are allowed to be children.
Go on, he says, as I look out the window,
And I smile gleefully at the scene passing by.
Take me somewhere where the bad stuff can’t go.
Drugs and alcohol are banned.
Teenagers are not frowned upon,
And we as people can live in blissful ignorance of everything bad.
Do you remember your childhood, asks the train and I nod to him.
Yes, sir, I do.
Do you want to leave behind your friends?
No, sir, I don’t.
Don’t you think they will be hurt when they discover you gone?
I once again look out the window, watching the beauty of the night turn to day.
Take me to a place where I can keep in touch with the ones I love.
Very well dear child, says the train as he continues on to this destination.
As the train slows I see a town,
Filled with smiling faces and children running around.
Here we are dear child, your destination is here.
Do you know the name of the town, I ask.
Yes dear child, I believe it is called Heartland.
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Came into my mind and when I started writing it seemed to make sense. please tell me what you think
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That was lovely!
I like that it was it told a story, but it was still poetic. I agree with Frodofan, it was a little confusing to read when there were no quotation marks around dialog, but I still read it easily. In a way, this almost feels like a song, and I like that! Great job. This was very inspiring!
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:O woww.
honestly.
the first paragraph caught mee right away.
i couldnt stop reasond it until i reached the very end. this is awesome. i loved it you have my applaud. best piece ive read today for sure
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Home should always be where the heart is but it is often a sad fact in this day and age it often isn't.
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This is a great piece.... definately well worth the read on this one, wonderful imagery as well
Karen
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Wonderful poem it really has everything my hats off to you!
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haha sounds like an awesome place, except for the ban on booze great write , great poem great topic, so many people will connect with this on another level while many more will take it for face value i myself like to think i look at it both ways and perhaps am enlightened
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The heartland is the place within ourselves that we find deep inside - we see the good things, and leave the bad behind. That train that takes us there is the life we lead, the road we take. I am sure all will see something different, but that is what this makes me think of.
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very creative work my friend.. i like ur theme of train, it some how helped me to relate and understand.. its was a lil awkwards to imagine a train asking question but its was still okay..
it brings peace and hope or atleast an idea where it can exsist in pure harmony..
i found ur work very orignal.. i feel there is some polish needed. lines that can enhance this write..if u could rephrase them, the write will reflect more..
"'Telling me' it can take me to a better place"..its very imp line in ur write.. u can use more descriptive words than 'telling me'.. but it also brings the childs voice out of us
"'tell me' the place in your mind"
this lines are fine but lacks something..
anyways i like the read and thanks for shairng such a read to this group
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Sounds like a very peaceful place, a place I too would love to find. Great imagery in this piece as well. Great job. ~Bret~
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I like it. It's very neat. I think it would be good if the speaking parts were in quotations, like when the train replies, but it's really original. You know I prefer strict rhyme etc. but I the softness and in and out here really added something - at least to me - to the tone of it all.
It's a very original idea and I must say, if something ever calls you like that... listen to it and go! Heartland. Ah yes, I think most people would like to find it. It is very nice to see something new written by you.
Keep me updated on how you're doing.
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