Sometimes I remember...
Other times and other places.
Like old faded photographs,
An album of familiar faces.
A young boy with sad eyes.
A dad he never really knew.
My mother's beautiful smile,
Her pain well hidden from view.
Dear grandma all dressed in black,
Standing in the rain one cold day.
A troubled young man beside her.
His mother's pain had gone away.
Sometimes I remember...
A man who kept trying to do his best
Always hoping that one day,
All his demons would be laid to rest.
Sometimes I find myself praying...
That the memories would just fade away.
Then all of my demons would be gone.
There would be no yesterday.
A contest entry
- The Write Place by Legend.
1000 points, ended July 18, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The rhyme and flow move well, the reader is drawn into old memories, looking back at life and praying the demons of yesterday will find peace for tomorrow. The pain can be hidden to seek satisfaction in the best job they can do.
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Thank You for the comment and applause. This picture was a prompt for a contest. I wanted to reflect on what memories remain for this man and which ones he is trying so desparately to erase.
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Amazingly well lwritten.
'There would be no yesterday'.. Wow.. its so nice to end it that way. Though yesterdays does have a sad charm lingering.. it would be a lot better if there jus twas a 'No' yesterday.. I like the way you think and conclude.. A very beautiful poem.. touching. wonderfully penned.. good luck!
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Thank you! A wonderful comment...very thoughtful and much appreciated. ~ Sue
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Oh my goodness, you always bless us with such wonderful poetry. This is sad, but so very beautiful and bursting with imagery. Thank you for showing us this old photograph stored in your mind and the thoughts behind it. Beautiful. Good luck in the contest.
Shaz xx
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a wonderful poem with flawless rhyme and flow and lots of emotion...
Great job!
Lynda
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Thank you so much for the encouraging comment. ~ Sue
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A fine reflective piece that holds the emotions of the reader as they read it. Good luck in the contest. Love, C
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Thank you...I'm glad you enjoyed it. ~ Sue
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What a beautiful sad reflection on a life,I think you have taken the image and used it so very well One can see these thoughts running through his head I am so pleased that someone used this picture to write a poem about.I think there is so much to see within it Thank you for entering the contest Good Luck
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Thank you kind sir...I thought the picture was quite striking. I noticed that no one was using it for their poem...so I decided to give it a try. The other phrase choices were great too. I almost went for the grandma love one...I just became a grandma for the first time last year. He is always in my mind and heart. But I think this turned out well. Cheers ~ Sue
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very good
This is very good i can feel the sadness in the words
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Thank you for the nice comment...I do appreciate it. ~ Sue
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