When people say “I love you”, is it true ?
What kind of love resides within a soul,
when hatred soon appears to play its role ?
Love-hatred is a quite explosive brew.
The flowers of the seeds that once we sowed,
through anger’s flame have turned into despair.
The vapour of regret can not repair
the ruin of our once so blessed abode.
Yet there’s a secret salve to soothe such pain :
the balm of unconditioned love and peace,
forever free from envy’s mortal chain,
in union, thoughts of separation cease.
True love contains no hatred, fear or pain.
When two are one, they walk their path with ease …
Author notes
Sicilian Sonnet in iambic pentameter and an abbacddc efefef rhyme scheme
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I wrote this sonnet in eight different versions :
I. PETRARCHAN SONNET
II. FRENCH SONNET
III. ENGLISH SONNET
IV. SICILIAN SONNET
V. ITALIAN SONNET
VI. SPENSERIAN SONNET
VII. KEATS SONNET
VIII. KYRIELLE SONNET
"One Sonnet - Many Forms (Eight Versions)"
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3189850
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A contest entry
- BATTLE OF THE SONNETS ROUND 4 INVITE ONLY by mamad.
1225 points, ended July 22, 2007, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congratulations, Marion; you must be so pleased.
I love terza rima -- just recently discovered it and certainly hope you do explore it. I don't know why any "teacher" would ever discourage someone from looking into anything.
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Don't research the terza rima. That is one of my controversials!!! So is the kyrielle. But I do have troouble accepting the kyrielle because of the repeating. What you have done in the multi-version is exceptional. I am so pleased to have had you as a student!!!
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I think I would change the period at the end of line 6 to a semi-colon. then put "the" in lower case. Why? The thoughts seem to be firmly connected. This is well done.
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Praise again for this great sonnet - I've already commented on the content, true and well spoken. You are remarkable, what an idea this is, to demonstrate all the forms of sonnets with the same message. Your Sicilian is very good, best of luck!
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Eight different sonets! I don't know how to write one. lol I love the strong and powerful message in this. Love is the most powerful force in the universe when it's pure and can be the most destructive when it isn't. Words of truth as always maa!
Peace Georgia -
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