Wind patterns on silken waves
Reflects the mood down through the years
Of regal queens who rise and smile
Then bow far from sight
With unwanted tears~
Reluctant grains of desert sands
Tumbleweeds that seem confused
Are moved to make be-dappled dunes
Landscapes seldom seem or used~
Elusive flakes of timid snow
Emboldened by mountain heights
Spread ghost-like fingers through the hair
Of winter's hemisphere of white~
Breezes brush the canvas earth
But masters touch we can't ascend
For looking closer at this art
We know there is more than the wind~
Author notes
Rambling thoughts
I dunno about the pic what do you all think lol?
Written August 25th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- you speak of nature as i listen of thee... by TheRamer.
251 points, ended December 1, 2003, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Beautiful writing, a very descriptive poem Breezes brush the canvas earth
But masters touch we can't ascend
For looking closer at this art
We know there is more than the wind~
nature is truly a wonderful thing and you have captured a part of it in this writing. I love the line But masters touch we can't ascend nature is surely a masterpiece .. well done !!! ~~wishintreeUK~~
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Most Most Eloquent!
I think that pic is frikkin awesome! And this write, holy crap! This was amazingly beautiful! How do you do it?! I'd give anything to put the words so eloquently! You have a very pure talent for this, and I just can't get enough of your writes! great job and thank you so very much for entering this!
Sincerely,
MrPink -
Your poetry is so full of beauty, beautiful words and beautiful subjects your work is always such a pleasure to read. It instils beauty in my day.
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Love this is amazingly beautiful Susan
just connection with mother earth and god's spirit in this one
I think the picture reflex's
For looking closer at this art
We know there is more than the wind~
Love & Peace
Pauline
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I love this, it was so beautiful, and you made me get all goose pimpley. Thank you for your comments. You really gave me the faith, see I dont write poetry so I can hear people tell me how taleted I am, I write because its something I feel in my heart, and I want to make people feel what I feel, in the poetry, anyway, I live in Haines City. Polk County. We are not too far away from each other.
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Susan ~
You have such a talent for capturing the essense of nature with your words. This is a very lovely write. Very soft and enchanting, like a soft breeze. I love the stanza with the snowflakes. Excellent descriptions.
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WOW what a great write.u give the winds likeness such a picture in my head with words u have choosen to express ur self.i see u really like the wind and i think i should write about the wind b/c its such a great weather.well love this one!!!!!!!! keep writing ur amazing peoms.
love
gabs
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This is beautiful! It just seems to whisp right over my shoulder touching me. Like tapping me gently on the shoulder saying, Wake up! Life is full of living things and nature touches us all!
Gorgeous write.
Thanks for sharing.
Hugs and blessings.
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Breezes brush the canvas earth
But masters touch we can't ascend
For looking closer at this art
We know there is more than the wind~
I love your words and the picture is awesome!!
Red -
breath taking
i love the picture almost as much as i love the poem. this is beautifully written for just rambaling thoughts, i wish my thoughts were as beautiful as yours and that i could weave them as you. my fav. stanza is:
Wind patterns on silken waves
Reflects the mood down through the years
Of regal queens who rise and smile
Then bow far from sight
With unwanted tears~
and
Elusive flakes of timid snow
Emboldened by mountain heights
Spread ghost-like fingers through the hair
Of winter's hemisphere of white~
i love the entire poem,but those stanzas are my absolute fav. and t.y for commenting on paradise's destroyed dream, im glad that you enjoyed reading it, and your welcome on the comments that i leave, but i should be thanking you, because you write such lovely poems. so t/y.
my dad is also a cancer survivor of lukiemia, and has luckily been in remission for a few years, but his health is not so great, so i dont know how that will turn out, hopefully all for the best. your in my heart and my thoughts, im wishing you the very best of luck with the soon to come surgery. please let me know that your well when you come back sweetie. anyways hun, t/y for writing and posting this, it is truely beautiful. *hugs* @:;- ~Julzzz~ -
This is beautiful Susan.
You never seem to run out of beautiful words and images.
Reading your writing is so calming in a way.
Lovely hun.
I've been away but I will catch up...
((Hugs)) ~ Ce
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I agree with Jim...the pictures walk hand in hand with the words, you always manage to do that you have an abundant source of beautiful images...
"Spread ghost-like fingers through the hair
Of winter's hemisphere of white"
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You definitely need to leave the picture. Your words were woven into that scene. The imagery of your poem could stand alone, but it's like the picture you have posted was made for your write.
Jim aka ThePoetAmuse -
Susan I just loved the lines~~'Reluctant grains of desert sands'
&'Elusive flakes of timid snow'~~ making me wish I would have thought of those lines myself girl.
There was something so spiritual about this~~ made me feel peaceful somehow~~ yet sad
And of course your picture is perfect....isn't always??
Lovely Susan
~~Dawn
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What a beautiful poem. I love the pic as well. Please come read my new poem.
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Absolutely enthralling. You are gifted with an artists
mind and ability to paint emotions and images with words.
Fey like..I see Faerie Queens within this beautiful work.
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havent been round to catch up on my reads and the first one i read of yours is simply breathtaking......and the pic is fab!!!!! Love your imagry and can almost feel the wind touch my soul......
hugs and prayers, di -
Loved the last stanza! Almost as beautiful as the poet herself! :-) You certainly seem to be in tune with nature. hmmmm....think you could talk these clouds overhead into a little rain? We sure could use some here! :-)
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I LOVE IT! I love it all! The pic and everything! It's like you're speaking her thoughts as she looks to the heavens! My personal fav stanza in this one...
Elusive flakes of timid snow
Emboldened by mountain heights
Spread ghost-like fingers through the hair
Of winter's hemisphere of white~
it's just SO vibrant!
Luv ya HUGS
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Thank you so much for your comment on my poem "Of Hell and Angels"....came over here to see you and leave a comment right away, but couldn't get the darn thing to post (server error)! I just love these mystical nature poems that you have written, the imagery is wonderful and I always love the pictures you choose to go with them. Very, very nice work! Peace and blessings to you! ~Janet~
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mmm.. so serene and tranquil
Elusive flakes of timid snow
Emboldened by mountain heights
Spread ghost-like fingers through the hair
Of winter's hemisphere of white~
**I loved this stanza.. the portrayal of snowflakes as something ghostlike and awesome (in the sense that they inspire awe
) is so refreshing after hearing so many times about how sparkly and fluffy they are o.O
Very nice, mysterious write I enjoyed it a lot.
~Scarlet
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This was done with your usual excellence....I like the sureality of the pic with it , only because you left the wind as sort of mysterious with the words " we know there is more then the wind " That made the wind a bit surreal....not knowing what is really behind it
Reenie
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Very nicely done Sis.. a collection of thoughts surrounding the picture.. as always you take us to a land of dreams..
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Breathtaking
OH WOW! This is so wonderfull, I'm practically speechless. The pictures that formed into my head when I read this were gorgeous! I absolutely LOVE IT! I especially like "...Elusive flakes of timid snow
Emboldened by mountain heights
Spread ghost-like fingers through the hair
Of winter's hemisphere of white..." That took my breath away. I'm so pleased I got to read this poem, it's spectacular!
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Excellent imagery in this piece... I like the picture, but I dont think it does your poetry justice... your words are too beautiful. I enjoyed reading. Thanks - Helen
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Excellent!!!
AWESOME, Sis!!! Stunningly BEAUTIFUL ! One of your best! (and that's saying something!)
Love,
< 3 Maureen
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This is so beautiful, Susan.
Elusive flakes of timid snow
Emboldened by mountain heights
Spread ghost-like fingers through the hair
Of winter's hemisphere of white~... this is just so vivid and apt in its description.
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Susan
This is Stunningly Beautiful !!!!!!!!!!!!
Your poetry is the wind's whisper
I adore these images
My fav:
Breezes brush the canvas earth
But masters touch we can't ascend
For looking closer at this art
We know there is more than the wind~
Love you,
Karen
p.s. I will keep you in my prayers sweetie
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really nice imagery in this poem. I love the tumbleweeds in the
desert sand, and be-dappled dunes.
never was one much for show though.
a lovely write.
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