here,with unbearable silence
heavy with your absence
emptiness showering memory's rain
life on wasteland....
A contest entry
- Overnight Quickie Paying it Forward by hoodoolover.
1050 points, ended July 13, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Okay
Nice "from the heart" write - Keep on keeping on - Joe - (Dobar Dan) --------------------- smiles ---------------have a great day --------------------- bye
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Good write.
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Outstanding
This poem is full of sadness. I thought it was well-written and managed to convey a lot of emotion in so very few words. I liked the imagery you chose and the over-all flow. Best of luck in the contest.
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seems we have something in common these days dear
wished I could say that was a good thing, but sadly I cannot ... all I can do is leave you with a hug and three little yellow fellows
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I think you've described the emotions one feels when experiencing emptiness perfectly. I would have loved to read more!
But what you've written here is exquisite!
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This is a great start, but not enough words,
thanks for entering!
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