Keep the gate closed...
Ants troop dancing on its top...
Rio Carnival!
Tread lightly beneath
This cherry tree...feasting time...
Seven nightingales!
Stray bull's eyes shine
Watching, heart all afflutter,
The red-frocked stunner
A hooting whistle
On her lips meant for kisses...
Booked for wrong parking
Each time he slows bike
Spring blossoms, succulent fruits...
Her coy, joyous hug
Nuns inhale the sun
Sea-cast pearls around their feet...
Oh, giggling penguins
Burly constable
Sipping crimson lolly-pop
Mustachios bristling
The picture smiles...
Do you dare, speak up, painter,
Make one small blemish?
Flowers mesmerized
By their glow aloft the trees
Do have vertigo
The mahout sleeps slumped
Astride the tired elephant...
Festivities done
Rainclouds gallop high
Hard I run panting breathless...
Who will reach home first?
A contest entry
- Simple Beauty by Danna Hobart.
300 points, ended October 14, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thanks for sharing this with me.
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There is a sense of joy and exuberance in this string of haiku, which I find exhilerating. Very enjoyable.
Bill
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This is a feast of images, and some made me chuckle - the policeman's moustache!
Good fun.
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Leaving aside the title this becomes a nice piece of poetry.
Yes as a poem this is nice and yet I feel the title is so wrong. A 76 line Haiku is surely not possible. Even if we discount the number of syllables (5-7-5) traditionally it has 3 lines and a reference to a season.
haikus are brief
Perhaps the greatest exponent was Matsuo Basho http://oldpoetry.com/oauthor/show/Matsuo_Basho who can be seen on our sister site OLDPOETRY.
Sorry to rant on Venu. Perhaps Shakespeare was right when he said "what's in a name, that which we call a rose would, by any other name, smell as sweet." The poem is OK
Jim
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