the black eyed susan
smiles vividly in the sun:
no wife bashing here
Author notes
I originally had radiantly but
changed it to avoid the 'I say "raidyantly" in three syllables, you say "raideeantly" in four' argument.
I think 'vividly' makes a good substitute, don't you?
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A contest entry
- Wildflowers Haiku by Melodies.
475 points, ended July 15, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - No work required for this contest. Prewrites only. by yoopea.
617 points, ended July 21, 2007, 74 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Gotta love haikus about flowers! Nicely done, and keep up the great work, poet! Good luck in the contest.
~Star~ -
Coincidence both you and I had haiku as the 19th post on our Poem-Lists...I think everything from my last to the next 100-or-so are probably haiku-writes, though!
I really like the A-HA moment of the last line of this haiku--You can be assured no one will insinute spousal abuse as any part of this haiku!
Jo
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