Suddenly I sense light spilling
Into a dark abyss:
I pass over it, trembling,
And make believe that I'm dancing.
And it chuckles in its sleep.
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These are just a few fragments from notebooks, I have nowhere to put them.
Please tell me what you think, honest though::
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Interesting collection of notes. Tell me if you find out where it is going.
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sliver under the nail...
with teeth sharpened and ready to bite into its dance partner - i see a frothy foam around its mouth - Brisbane Ale?
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This sounds like the makeings of a poem of someone coming out of a deep sadness or it could stand on its own that way Thanks for sharing
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Im Alice Peacock and i think this is realy pritty. Its short but mum says it realy good because of that. I like it too because it like the dancing bit.
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..and Nietzsche reminds me of Little Miss Sunshine.
I really liked this, and would like to see the rest of the notebook. Maybe it all fits together.
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This is extremely profound, despite that it's so short. And it's open to interpretation; I also thought it had to do with death, and to be honest, the words and the idea are beautifully conveyed.
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Yes, well I have read a fair bit of Nietzsche, I was obsessed with him when I was younger.
"When you gaze into the abyss, the abyss also gazes into you."
Thanks for your kind comment.
K. F.
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Superb/unique/challenging
If the "dark abyss" is death, this one is most compelling, however, I sense their could be other interpretations, more profound.
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