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Across the Night

 

An unrestful sleep
leaves me awakened
thinking of you
across the night,
hoping your thoughts
are of me.

 

Knowing where you are,
that you cannot come home
is unbearable for me,
my tears flowing,
my heart fearing
you will not return.

 

My arms aching
as I watch the late news,
the rubble around you
as flashes of bombs
run my blood cold
and heighten my fears.

 

I mourn the dead
as you do,
looking deeply into my own soul
for answers I cannot find,
and I beg for you nightly.

 

Do they not know
that I need you more,
your child within me
grows without you,
and life is intolerable
for me alone.

 

Please come home to me,
remember to keep low
and place your feet carefully
as you carry proudly
your head high
as only our soldiers would.

 

God be with you,
my Darling,
and remember that my heart
is only yours,
think of me when you can,
for my every thought is of you.

 

I send to you
my love and kisses,
my heart and prayers,
for your safe return to me.

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# 3 Across the Night

pattyann4500 (Grams)

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  • Angel With No Halo
    July 26, 2007

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    Oh my.. this is quite lovely!!! I was watching Army Wives last night(had it recorded) and there was this woman... who had an older son and was PG with another baby.. and she lost her husband in the war.. They had made her move out..and it is was just the saddest thing.. worst of all is that women all over the country are having to deal with this everyday... and to have to pick up and leave the last home you shared with the man you love.. is such a horrible thing.. but the most horrible is an unborn child.. never knowing their own father... and never will they have the chance.. your words peirced my soul.. as I was almost one of those women. Thank you for entering Grams... you certainly tore at my heartstrings with this one.

    Love,
    ~Krys~


  • Angel With No Halo
    July 18, 2007
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    Please let me know which one of my friends you are in you auth comments . Thanks hon!!


  • Shadow Lynx
    July 15, 2007

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    Very good poem Patty, i could feel the tension,pain ,loneliness and fear through this poem.There will be many mnay readers who will be able to relate to this on a higher degree than i will ,but because of how it is written it gives us all a glimpse of the despair of having loved ones fighting in a foreign land .Great heartfelt piece


    • pattyann4500
      July 15, 2007
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      Thank you, my dear friend. It is sad to know there are still people losing loved ones, but it's also very sad for those who long to hold their loved ones safely again. Hugs, Patricia


  • Sweet Jane
    July 14, 2007

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    Oh so lovlly

    great poem.
    you are so good on your poems
    and good to me and my mother
    I am going to write a poem about you.
    love megan kiss* kiss*

    • pattyann4500
      July 15, 2007
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      Thank you, my sweet Meagan. Love, Grandma


    • pattyann4500
      July 14, 2007
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      Thank you, Meagan. I hope your mother is feeling better. Give her a really big hug for me, and tell her to kiss you for me.


  • Pure Thought silver member
    July 13, 2007

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    Been on the other side of this equation

    It pains me so that I can't go,
    To the arms of my lover, my baby's mother.
    Trapped a world away instead,
    With the fear and the crying and the dead.


    • pattyann4500
      July 13, 2007
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      Indeed, my friend, it would be difficult for either end. I can only imagine the loneliness and worry for the loved ones our brave military has left behind. Thank you, Buddy. Hugs, Patricia


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    July 13, 2007

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    Do they not know
    that I need you more,
    your child within me
    grows without you,
    and life is intolerable
    for me alone.


    Take that stanza out, and the whole thing loses it's soul. Those lines will I think, be the most heartfelt ones of them all. A clearly devoted partner in need of the safe return of her lover, understandable, and words uttered nightly across the globe, but with those lines above added, changes this completely to a higher level. Extremely well written my friend,and felt deeply too.


    • pattyann4500
      July 13, 2007
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      Thank you, Mikey. I'm sure you're right. I couldn't help but remember all those women alone with babies being born without their fathers at home with them. I'm afraid that's the one thing that worries me most about this war-those babies who may never know their daddies. Again, thanks, Mikey. Love and Hugs, Sis


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    July 13, 2007

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    I am in awwww of just how powerful your poem really is. It can relate to thins poem on such a very personal level as I have been deployed overseas, and this piece took me back to my own personal memories. You are such a talented poet and skilled writer. I think you will do very well in the contest.


    • pattyann4500
      July 13, 2007
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      Thank you, Ed. I have had one family member go to war, and I was very young. I can only imagine what someone would feel if their loved one were there. My prayers are with them day and night. Hugs, Patricia


  • DJ Harley silver member
    July 13, 2007

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    very lovely and sad poem patty, I know what war can do. Good luck in the contest

    your freind John

    • pattyann4500
      July 13, 2007
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      Thank you so much, John. I appreciate your kind comment. Hugs, Patricia


  • leo2
    July 13, 2007

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    This is so you. I can only imagine how many letters like this have been written through the ages. Each one carrying the hopes and fears of an awaiting lover. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


    • pattyann4500
      July 13, 2007
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      I'm sure the letters have been many. My heart so hurts for those who have loved ones in the cruel war. Thank you, my friend. Hugs, Patricia


  • Whoochi gold member
    July 13, 2007

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    ~~tears fall slowly down my cheeks..so often we forget about the loved ones left here waiting for them to come home..the worry, the longing, the love and praying are just consumed daily until they get home safe and sound...you have put exceptional emotional strength in this...the imagery was vivid where i could see him walking....well done..Good Luck!


    • pattyann4500
      July 13, 2007
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      Thank you, Whoochi. I'm afraid I did much worse to myself for writing this. I was once told that empathy was a gift. Unfortunately for me, it has been a curse. I cry far too easily when I watch the news. Hugs, Patricia


  • MargaretG
    July 13, 2007

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    Dear one, you really know how to place yourself in someone's shoes and relate the thoughts and emotions of their situation. You pulled at my heartstrings with this prayer/letter.


    • pattyann4500
      July 13, 2007
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      Thank you, Dear Margaret. Now if only I could put myself in another's shoes and not cry about it, I'd do just fine. Hugs, Patricia

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