You make a fool of me with your opal eyes
I burn and scream like gasoline
These times are razor sharp cutting so deep
I just want to sleep an' not make a peep
You always put on a show
The moon and stars an afterglow
You eclipse them with your dead pan eyes
That hypnotise
Make waste of my lies
And if I ever wanted to take flight
I'm out of sight
Strung out and light
I'll play the part
This junkie heart
It's just the start...
You always put on a show
The moon and stars an afterglow
You eclipse them with your dead pan eyes
That hypnotise
Make waste of my lies
If I ever wanted to take flight
I'd shoot up the night
Strung out and light
I'm out of sight
So don't scratch and bite
These times are razor sharp cutting so deep
I just want to sleep an' not make a peep
Careful don't blink
Or even think
I burn and scream like gasoline
So I'll cut an' run
Shoot me up then I'm done
Shoot me up then I'm done
Author notes
Options 1 & 2
A contest entry
- Options and shizz yeah? by Ilma.
600 points, ended July 31, 2007, 27 entries
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Comments
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I liked it, the rhythm is good, and it would be good as a song I think haha, I love this stanza: 'You always put on a show
The moon and stars an afterglow
You eclipse them with your dead pan eyes
That hypnotise
Make waste of my lies'
And you also managed to combine 2 options, which is always good Well done and good luck
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this certainly does have that sex, drugs, and rock n roll feel to it and just kind of races by when you read it. Which I think fits the topic even more since those three things tend to make life seem to go by faster.
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i really like this poem a lot. the rhyming and rythm are overall good. and i love the topic [[haha sex drugs & rock n'roll<--u can never go wrong with that]] but yea i just really liked this piece a lot. but now we have the bad news. i need to no ur AP name and y u wrote thi piece, or just AP name. message me when u do. and thanx for entering. good luck =]
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