He splashes
canvas with azure, foam-topped musings
interrupted by amber, spreading mass
He gathers
purpled oils to compliment
in clumps of peaks and dips
--lush, green ravines surrounding
He breathes life,
infuses Spirit,
approves production of mind's voicing
Carefully, he balances all
upon earth's revolving easel
--spinning it--
inspiring search for Interpretation
In a list
A contest entry
- 10 spots, 30-50 words, 30 minutes by Tangled Angle.
300 points, ended July 13, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-write Party 2 by DancingRed.
300 points, ended September 22, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PREWRITES ONLY by wingsofgold25.
500 points, ended September 28, 2007, 117 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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how cool is this poem
it is the earth
and god
what a way to voice this poem
with the spin being such an awsome line
to see in ones eye
beautiful just beautiful
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This is really great. At first I thought it was merely an artist painting a picture, then it seemed to be God or a creator 'painting' on the features of Earth. A beautiful poem on creation, you are very talented.
The only part I didn't understand was the last line. It kind of confused me, because it didn't seem to go with the rest of the poem, and seemed a little anticlimactic- but I guess I just didn't understand it.
Overall, a really great write. -
I think your "nic" is five star!
...good poem, too.
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fabulous
good imagery and wonderfully written
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Exclent
i did like the poem so very much to me it was a very enjoyble poem. i truly think that it will be a good contest. looking forward to reading all those that enter. i do hope that you will have a great night
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good stuff some amazing imagery used here ( :
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This is a very well written piece I enjoyed it very much. I want to thank you for your entry and wish you good luck in the contest.
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Most beautiful and colourful descriptions; your metaphors fit in so well.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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I enjoyed your "azure, foam-topped musings", and "purpled...peaks and dips". Careful, balances, revolving and spinning, together bring to mind a gyroscope put into motion. Your "earth's revolving easel" evoked a very visual picture in my mind.
The last line is beautiful, for it takes little searching indeed, to find daily evidence of His majesty, power and love. Which echoes back to the title. Nicely done!
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I now have read your poem 7 times, and each time, a new insight and subtle understanding blooms in my mind ... the metaphor here is so amazing and fitting ... it seems as if He is really having a lot of fun - while some of us refuse to play with him and lament their fate ... if only we could always be aware of the shortness of our visit to planet earth, and the impermanence of all things, including pleasure and pain, life would be a celebration ...
(now let's see, if He wishes to delete this one
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maa -
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I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem and can appreciate it's many layers. Creation truly declares His majesty and the intricacies of divine plan. For he desires for us to seek Him -- to strive for Interpretation.
I believe we may hold onto this one. We shall see!!!
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I love it! Exquisite imagery and language. I love the use of color and skillful weave of metaphor. The form taken is brilliant - begining each of the 1st 3 stanza with God's action (He splashes, He gathers, He breathes life). They seem to build upon one another and culminate in the life-essence of Spiritual infusion - Awesome!
That las picture of the spinning easel of earth is so vivid. I saw it clearly in my mind. The last line is everthing a last line should be. It kind of comes at you sideways and blindsides you with a profound truth yet after reading it you see that it was the subject of the piece all along. Brilliantly done!
You know that titles are important to me and I love this one. It fits perfectly but doesn't reveal too much so as to spoil the last line yet after reading the last line it takes on a much deeper meaning. Perfect!
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Liked the metaphor used in this poem - great interpretation of the prompt given in the contest. Bronze in good!
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Beautiful imagery and a wonderful take on the prompt
Congratulations on that lovely shiny bronze
Gaylene
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Interesting, lovely images. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Hurry, hurry!
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Your prompt is: Earth’s Easel
Please do not use this as your title. I already have a poem of mine, that has this title. Also this is anonymous judging, it’s pain in the arse when you got 3 people with the same title.
If you need more time, let me know. I will wait for you. You are taking the time to write for my contest, and I respect that. Just do try and finish within 30 minutes. [And I understand sometimes there’s computer trouble, etc..]
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