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Salmon and Snow Peas

The musical clergy sits at the table
with thoughts of laughter that imitates the art
      of our being.
When we talk each has its own story
Some choose to eat the salmon first
but the wise save the best for last.

Although I am more musical than some
I still listen to the others
whose life has become its own article of history
I have some catching up to do.
                   

Maybe I am the salmon

Saved for last.

Author notes

Dinner Time. I'm beginning to enter a more musical part of myself. =)

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  • Jasmine Rayne
    August 30, 2008
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    I like this. It's very interesting...

    "Although I am more musical than some
    I still listen to the others
    whose life has become its own article of history
    I have some catching up to do.


    Maybe I am the salmon

    Saved for last."

    A very intriguing write indeed. Loved it. Thank you for entering.







    -Lily♥


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    August 27, 2008

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    This is a wonderful way of taking that prompt, you captured such wonder and left the reader with questions to answer. Well done, best to you


  • Salt Therapy
    August 14, 2008
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    this has nothing to do with my prompt.


    • IamRemy
      August 14, 2008
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      I thought it had very much to do with the prompt. I am lonely in my amateur music talent. I find freedom through the hope of improvement. You can only go up from the bottom.

      • Salt Therapy
        August 14, 2008
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        hmm. I suppose so, i guess i just didn't get that for some reason. I do apologize. I reread it, and I do like it.

        • IamRemy
          August 14, 2008
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          No problem really. I dont expect any readers to completely understand anyone's work. It's what's in my head you know?
          thanks for taking the time to read my poetry


  • yoopea
    July 13, 2007

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    hey dude

    you've improved unbelievably since those poems you posted on here from before.

    really, i can now see some great potential.

    this is good.


  • TexasAngelOne
    July 13, 2007
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    Very Interesting

    And I do like the metaphoric way you have expressed yourself...


  • blueyez
    July 13, 2007

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    This was very interesting with your use of metaphor!
    Bravo!! Peace and Love

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