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Get On [With The Pain] & Shut Up

Do you want to hold me darling;;

taste all those kisses he took,

that you [begged] me to keep for you,

when you were busy (in.her) &

every other woman you could .find.

Does it |shock| you that I won't c|a|r|e;;

that your heart is no longer my concern,

you've made your bed [go.lie.in.it]

I didn't ask for your opinion then,

don't ask for mine now sweet nothing;;

Clean up your act, you dirty boy,

close your eyes and fantasize a little more;;

can you see the image of me [kissinghimgently?],

isn't it a beautiful disaster for you darling,

& a tasty reality for me?

Come now no reason to c/r/y,

you didn't give a damn last time.

When you had your tongue down her throat,

it didn't matter then what I done.

I was always your little s/l/u/t though, wasn't I?

That made things a little more [hard;;perhaps?]

for you to cope with -- but no matter darling,

it's coming to the end of the day for me now,

& of course you are invited to the wedding.

[I.Want.To.Hear.You.Cry.In.The.Crowd.]

After all the tears you caused me for years,

taste the truth .I.don't.love.you.anymore,

it hurts for you now doesn't it (its your turn).
Tears broke me once babydoll, now it's you,

you're the 'weak' one;;

&& guess what my old sweetheart? -

I find it quite funny.

**Giggles.Hysterically.**

Sorry, did I just laugh at your misery,

*cough* forgive me, it was just necessary.

Baby, baby;; the reason I breathed was you,

but now the reason I breathe is knowing,

[nasty|but|true] you are no longer my boy,

no longer my little problem [like a STD].

Wont you just l*e*a*v*e me a|l|o|n|e;;

I have the one I really l♥o♥v♥e,

so just get on with the pain [& fucking shut up].

Author notes

I dunno really...whatever comes with what you think of my write..

option 2...dirtypretty


my ex thinks i'm really interested in him, yeah he just needs to grow up and realise he's not the only player.

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  • EvenStarsBreak--x
    July 28, 2008

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    You write dirty pretty so wonderfully, It was truly amazing. =] Really well written, awesome write.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    July 6, 2008

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    I must sayyy I love how you write dirty-pretty poems. They're so...idk, vivid ? haha and they make your words just stand out so clearly to the reader. I used to know someone like this. You did an amazing job portraying every guy out there who can't keep his pants on

    "Come now no reason to c/r/y,
    you didn't give a damn last time."

    AMAZING lines. Perfection, actually. Thank you so much for the entry & best of luck to you !! ♥


  • PaintedParisPassion
    September 1, 2007

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    taste all those kisses he took,

    that you [begged] me to keep for you,

    when you were busy (in.her)

    omg
    this is like my heart in so many words
    i love this and i love you
    you're so on the finalists list
    you kick ass!!!
    thanks for entering
    good luck!!!

    :]


  • Dancing Marionette
    August 11, 2007

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    i abosultely love the bitchy tone in this. the i dont give a fuck what you do, its your life and you arent apart of mine.
    it made me smile [:


  • MelissahhMidnite
    August 3, 2007
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    "[I.Want.To.Hear.You.Cry.In.The.Crowd.]
    After all the tears you caused me for years,"
    I loved these lines. They're amazing.

    "Sorry, did I just laugh at your misery,
    *cough* forgive me, it was just necessary."
    These were good too. I love your sarcasm, it works so well with these writes.


  • Heartbeatsxfading
    August 2, 2007
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    holy shit.

    I LOVED this!

    I especially loved how you put your humor into it

    My favorite lines were
    "Come now no reason to c/r/y,

    you didn't give a damn last time.

    When you had your tongue down her throat,

    it didn't matter then what I done.

    I was always your little s/l/u/t though, wasn't I?"

  • LaurenLightning--x
    July 31, 2007
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    OhMyGosh.
    Ouch.

    when you were busy (in.her) &
    every other woman you could .find.

    &&

    I didn't ask for your opinion then,
    don't ask for mine now sweet nothing;;

    I would hate to be the person you're talking about in this :]

    Awesome write though, very strong throughout. And I just -love- your word choise. It's amazing :] Well done.

    iChewGlitter -x


  • thelovesongwriter
    July 13, 2007
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    this is really depressing& great! although this is super devastating, I truly loved it<333 great write and best of luck<3


  • Vashman
    July 13, 2007

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    *DROPS MOUTH*
    AMAZING!!!

    sometimes I say things like this in my head and reallywish I could say all this to my ex while slapping him in the goddamned face!

    lol but, like you say, I have the one I love now...


  • xXRawerxX
    July 12, 2007

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    Omg my first comment was before I read this...this onei read it wow....sounds like a real asshole. Im sorry if this acually happened but i still absolutely love this!! Keep up the good work.<

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