I find it hard NOT to write
end-rhymes, but have hidden
them by placing rhymes where
they are in mid-sentence or
in unexpected places. Insight
helps locate even forbidden
locations, but not to impair
flow of meaning. You deplore
rhyme? Unsure as a neophyte,
spelling of words has again
gone unnoticed? I don't care
if you shun my words, uproar
shows it happens. My sleight
of words demands our protean
knowledge so you do not err:
each line, like an open door
to richness of verbal flight
with Muse to guide by chosen
route to elder porte-cochère,
there to travel and explore:
end-rhymes in rhyme-scheme abcd x 5
Author notes
This is an example of hidden rhyme, as a challenge.
It becomes easier if read aloud...and of course
the rhyme-scheme helps too.
Protean is a real word (Dictionary.)
Please tell me what you think
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Yes with the rhymes inside the poem like that it contributes in a different way. Seems to help the flow I enjoyed this read and life this style.
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Smiles
I do not see what people dislike in rhymes - it is the clumsy poets one must avoid.
ABCD is a scheme that practically hides itself, it seems that the ear does not retain rhyming sounds for more than three lines. Couplets are the most obvious rhymes, and the most often used by beginners, hence the most misused. They can be beautiful if well done.
However, in this case, I am the choir. I hope you reach your intended audience.
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Spelling and enjambment
English is rich in the number of ways to spell common ending sounds. My Muse served them up like on a platter!
Sneaky to hide, I guess, what would likely not have been noticed anyway, but fun. Another way is the use of words with two or more syllables-- and enjambment that puts the rhyme in midsentence that without punctuating, continues into the next line.
Why hide? I was appalled to see (might as well admit it) how many sane members posting in the AP forums hate loathe and detest rhymed poetry, end-rhymes in particular. I have written free verse too, but the tendency there is to have a stretched-out paragraph unless poetic devices (metaphor, alliteration, oxymorons, hyperbole) are there too. And meter does not exist.
Did it "reach the choir?" So far, counting you, only two.
You know these things but I have a pointer to this poem in AP Classes' teacher forum. Just trying to help!
An aside: I was down to 8 poems in My Page again last night. (Kick me again!) I'm going there to check it out.
I was appalled to see (might as well admit it) how many sane members posting in the AP forums hate loathe and detest
rhymed poetry, end-rhymes in particular.
Terry
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