Love struck eyes of puppy demure
Sweet and fleeing
Tidal pool deep
The familiar under-tones of society
With wounding tongues and glaring eye
True love; a meaningless cliché
Born of movies and lyrics
Held to no ante-type
Care not that they refuse to cogitate
I have no desire to prove
No whim to bolster their capricious debate
Beyond the realm I have moved
With you leading the Dance Macabre
To uncharted bewitchment
Author notes
"Purple monkeys fly at night"
option #2
A contest entry
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900 points, ended July 20, 2007, 16 entries
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Finally, an allusion I recognize! Your poem has a nice flow and says a lot more than words. Thank you very much for entering the contest.
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My cousin and I had to study every detail of this poem to perfectly understand and while we were she said she didn't like it because it was confused and when we were done we were like OoOo ME LIKE lmso.... Nicely done <3333 I'm assuming it is something about people believing true love is impossible and you not getting into debate about it and going your own way. =]
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beautiful imagery, has a strong meaning. best of luck & thanks for entering
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I like this poem. Its nicely written, and well put together. Thanks for entering the contest!
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Since I'm going backwards, this is the first poem that actually chose #4. Thank you, I was waiting. YOu did an excellent job using that picture. And the poem in itself was very good as well. Good Job and Good Luck!
Kelly
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