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a mirror to the dream world

A mirror to the dream world, hold onto your dreams tight,
you might loose them in the depths of the mind.
Even when the moon isnt out giving it's generous light.

With a solid, dirty hand,
they where created from the void and placed
on this silt laiden, soild land,
along side the dawn of man.
They're seperate forms of life ones that would grow
to be compleately bound to the earth.

Those were the times when dreams and fears
blended in with the burnt maroon and scarlett sky
that was textured like satin ribbons.
The days before man began to take intrest.

But then the magic was taken away
and placed back behind mirrors, worlds and barriers
where man could rarely go.

A mirror within a dream world,
the one can free you on many occasions at night.
Even though it seems given be aware
of the enties that can take you there.

One was reviered and placed in the light
and the other reviled, was cast away into the night,
just like the broken carcass of a carrion nightengale
who had only one chance to sing.

And the one who remained in the light
lost her greatest friend,
the only one she knew she couldn't defend.

Now they are seperate but the same
and they have grown to feel shame for one another.
While Azadeh has been cast away and becomes unkown,
Alvira is viewed as perfect and is reknown.

A mirror to the dream world is what they now gaurd,
Azadeh and Alvira the fae of dark and light dreams.
But beware of their trikery, or you might find
yourself left caught up in a self created bind.

For both will lead you into traps to test you,
to see where your mind can lead too
and they'll never let you go, the dream spells they'll cast upon you.
Their satin kisses and silky limbs seem inviting
but beware its not that obvious when your there.














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please tell me how you feel about this, it was difficult to write it. I had two seperate poems pop up at the same time, so i combined the two.

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  • Virgoan
    September 16, 2007
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    Love the imagery and I suggest you add a few more lines to make it better. Though with the existing ones, this is still a good poem.

    Nicely written

    Thanks so much for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing fellow poet.

    >>>VIRGOAN

  • Mercury Rising
    August 22, 2007

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    This poem was wonderful and replete with very original and arresting imagery. I particulary like the image of the carrion nightingale for some strange reason. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering this fascinating poem.

    David


  • Nobody Royale silver member
    July 13, 2007
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    beautiful poem...the imagery is fantastic...I love the fact you named the fairies...this poem has a beautiful flow to it as well...most moving line
    "blended in with the burnt maroon and scarlett sky
    that was textured like satin ribbons."
    Thank you for your entry and good luck

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