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Sedated

Catatonic eyes,
electrified lips;

your paralytic stare
leaves me motionless

statically immersed;

sedated

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  • J Macabre gold member
    July 12, 2007

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    Remenecent...

    Wow...takes me back to my younger years where i was lost in a hidious depression. Im not exactly sure what your expressing here...but i do like it...makes you think about what that feels like.


    Awesome


    -J.


  • Lady Eventide
    July 12, 2007
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    Wow. This was good. I smell a winner!


  • Exodus gold member
    July 12, 2007
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    O.O
    WHOAH! This is intense! Brilliant work!


  • eyes2see-wrds2speak
    July 12, 2007
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    this is cool...great write...