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You could have killed me faster.

You could have killed me faster.
You could have just shot me in the head.
Then all of this would be over.
Before I even knew I was dead.

You could have listened when I screamed.
And told me to shut up.
You could have felt my warm hands against you.
And you could have tied them up.

Instead you killed me slowly.
Confused by two figures sitting on your shoulders.
You always listened to the one of the left.
And because of him my life is over.

Instead of pushing me down.
You held me close inside your arms.
You said that everything would be just fine.
You promised you'd never do me any harm.

You COULD have killed me faster.
You could have just let me die.
You had to whisper another 3 words in.
Without any explanation of why.

You should have killed me faster.
You should have just shot me in the head.
That way all of this would have been over.
Before I ever knew I was dead.

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  • Decorus Somnium
    August 17, 2007
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    Very deep, strong and sad poem. I love your writing style.


  • Spookshow Baby
    August 8, 2007

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    Intense and direct. I loved how strong and heartfelt the emotions are. great rhyming and structure.