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Spirit to Spirit

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Spirit to Spirit

So many fine thoughts turn my spirit so.
Yet I do resist and yield to it yet.
Know that I give and all that I know.
Forget you? No, I shall never forget.

Left with my sandpaper dreams since you left.
Love lies in my spirit, for you my love.
Theft of your presence is not spirit theft.
Above all my dreams, I hold you above.

You now have returned, I knew it was you.
Waiting so long my heart was still waiting;
few have returned, yet you’re one of the few.
Aching for you as my soul was aching.

War takes so many; yet, you've beaten war.
Door of my spirit, come enter my door.

 

 

 

 

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Shadow Sonnet


Shadow Sonnet created by Amera M. Andersen may be written in any sonnet style. The Shadow takes place at the beginning and ending of each line as the words are identical or homophonic.
14 lines
9 or 10 syllables per line
Should have a volta or pivot
Iambic pentameter is not necessary

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  • DesolatELifE
    June 19

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    Reading the explanation of the form.. I first thought you said the end lines have to be homophoBic.. I wondered how I was going to make that work
    Very nice, as always. You're one of the poets who I can probably say 'I agree with all the comments below' without actually eading them, making the safe assumption that they all say it's great.


  • Rovingone gold member
    December 2, 2008

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    This poem has so many great thoughts, I'd be breaking the rules to put them all down. But, the best of all is

    Left with my sandpaper dreams since you left.
    Love lies in my spirit, for you my love.
    Theft of your presence is not spirit theft.
    Above all my dreams, I hold you above.

    This is just so cool. Your own style and it's just fine. You're amazing.


  • Tirrell
    November 30, 2008

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    A moving and profound sonnet, I love the form, and have been to the sp site, yet this is beautiful and beyond form, this poem is alive, and pulls at the readers soul. Very well done, and I might add Brilliant!


  • PerVirtuous
    July 12, 2008
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    Congratulations on the hardware.


  • Ellis gold member
    December 27, 2007
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    Bravo

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  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    December 27, 2007

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    Congratulations, I felt that I would like to add my own, despite Jeff already having spoken on my behalf.

    Please join us in the following rounds...Sue


  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 27, 2007

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    As you know I am not always a fan of form, but here the form and the content dovetailed superbly. If you hadn't tried to rhyme aching and waiting you would probably have won the gold.
    The sensual round starts today or tomorrow I'm looking forward to being melted by the seering heat of a passionate Amera poem in perfect rhyme and flow.
    Thanks a lot for entering this one.

  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 27, 2007
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    To win a prize, whatever colour, in these rhyming contests means you have written an exceptional poem. Each round has attracted a large entry and a lot of very good poetry.
    We both want to thank you for the entry and for the pleasure reading it gave us. Please continue to enter the later rounds and especially the Finale announcement coming soon on that.
    Thanks again and congratulations
    Jeff and Sue


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 10, 2007
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    Excellent work, very enjoyable


  • BeautifulSecret
    August 23, 2007

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    Beautiful!

    What talent! I could not begin to even attempt such a complicated style, not only have you done the style well but the poetry is beautiful. I am quite glad I stumbled upon your page today


    • Amera gold member
      August 23, 2007
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      Thank you! I'll have to visit your house.

  • kjrjane
    July 21, 2007
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    It left me with feeling . its good i liked it


  • myrataal silver member
    July 19, 2007

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    You are an INCREDIBLY talented Poet!

    And I truly love your work. It is a pleasure to see how dedicated you are to form poetry and how well you've implemented your talent to write this lovely shadow sonnet.

    Well done, Amera. BRAVO!

  • EvErLaStiNg DeSiRe
    July 18, 2007
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    forgot about the applause

  • EvErLaStiNg DeSiRe
    July 18, 2007

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    wowa, that is one of the best poems i've read in a really long time. Good job and congrats. I hope you continue with your work.


  • poemguru
    July 18, 2007
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    Happy yet sad, bitter yet sweet. Very nice work on the shadow.

    • Amera gold member
      July 18, 2007
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      Thank you for the comment and the applause. I don't think I've met you. I'll have to visit your work. Thanks again.

      *hig*
      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • adarkling
    July 18, 2007

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    Phenominal! Intreguing how the first and last words are the same! I had to keep re-reading this! A lump is what it bought to my throat! Please keep on writing you are an inspiration and I am in awe of you.

  • tinytoes
    July 17, 2007

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    Beautiful

    I am in awe of your talent. This is so moving, I have read and re-read this poem. Simply superb. Will definitely read more of your works. Julie.


    • Amera gold member
      July 17, 2007
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      Thank you Julie for the lovely comment and the "bunnies". I think I'll visit you too.


      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • Lord Dracon
    July 17, 2007
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    Very beautiful, well written, you have a wonderful gift, thanks for sharing.


  • Candy6
    July 17, 2007

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    A great poem. I like your style of writing poems that makes your poems to be special and unique.

  • Only In Dreams
    July 16, 2007
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    Wonderful

  • hazydreams
    July 16, 2007
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    Very beautiful write. The sonnet is cool. I like it alot. Good luck in the contest.


  • Je Suis Prete
    July 16, 2007

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    A very beautiful piece and I feel fortunate to have stumbled accross this tonight. You have a unique way of writing and thankyou for sharing.
    Sara


  • LadyLavender gold member
    July 16, 2007

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    Amera, you impress me so...Truly one of your best writes. Absolutely brilliant. Shines as you do!!!!


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    July 16, 2007

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    I can relate to the subject matter of this shadow sonnet. It is a very beautiful form indeed. To write form poetry is not easy, but if done with dedication, one can ace at it as has been proved by your sonnet here. Writing such effective and strict syllabic poetry is not possible for all, so I applaud you on having done it so wonderfully well. Bravo! I like the line you used as volta. It marks the bridge between the upper and lower parts of the sonnet so well. Very nice assonance and alliteration. Excellent rhymes too. Best of all, I love the last two concluding lines.
    A very deep poem, from the core of your soul, sung beautifully! It is amazing how you choose such a common topic as missing one's love and pen such creative genius out of it! Bravo! I really like how each line's starting and ending word is the same. I love the second quatrain and the wordchoice such as "sandpaper dreams" and "spirit theft". The line containing the words spirit theft is my most favourite one in the entire poem.

    All the best,
    Charishma

    • Amera gold member
      July 16, 2007
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      This is an amazing critique, I can’t thank you enough. You are obviously a poet and I plan to visit your work. Thank you again for the comment and the applause. You are far from average my friend.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • kooleyes
    July 16, 2007

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    I have no clue what a sonnet is but I do know what I like. I can honestly say that this is beautiful. Thanks for the read and keep on writing. P.S.. You are a very talented writer


  • Griswold gold member
    July 16, 2007

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    Interesting form indeed, I like it a lot, I just have one silly question, what the heck is a Volta?, I know Volvo, Vulva, Viola, Viagra, but not Volta!! ...Scott


    • Amera gold member
      July 16, 2007
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      LOL, Thanks for the smile. A volta is a pivot, a change in direction that is a mark of a good sonnet.

  • strangerforeigner
    July 16, 2007
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    Shadow sonnet. What a challenging form. You've done well here.


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    July 16, 2007

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    My two favorite lines are: "sandpaper dreams" and "door of my spirit, come enter my door." Usually I do not like rhyme, but since this is a new form shadow sonnet (catchy) I can tell you it works very well! The last part almost was a song so it could be a shadow song as well as a shadow sonnet. The only suggestion I might make is to get rid of the "nay." Not a word you often hear in poetry today. Great poem and good luck in the contest.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 16, 2007

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    Amera,

    I must admit this was very, very , very well done cubbie.. Bravo !!



    Dad


  • moluv10
    July 16, 2007

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    I like this style you've written in. The massage is so true. I'll lok forward to reading more fron you.


    • Amera gold member
      July 16, 2007
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      Thank you for your comment and applause.


  • Uhs Feth Malorn
    July 16, 2007

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    I think this is very beautiful, actually, although I wasn't expecting it to be. You've captured something very lovely here.


    • Amera gold member
      July 16, 2007
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      thank you for your comment and your applause.

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    July 16, 2007

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    This is a wonderful form you have penned here and the message is so true, not many return from hell like this, you have written this beautifully, one of the best I have read today

    Karen


  • ModernXTimes
    July 16, 2007

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    There aren't really any words I can use to describe this poem. It's absolutely breathtaking. One of my favorites.


  • manoguru
    July 16, 2007

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    hello dear, what have we here? it's been a long time since i last read any of your work. i clicked on this one because it was on the spotlight, and i must say that i very much admired it. unlike some of your other sonnets, this one doesn't have a problem with the sense and the sound. you are able to maintain the sense of the poem without much grammatical inversion. kudos to you. ok, you have proved your technical virtuosity. now stop being a show off!!!

    • Amera gold member
      July 16, 2007
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      I've missed you too. Thank you for the comment. I guess i have to show off to get you to read my work. LOL


      Love,
      Amera ♥

  • Rudolf
    July 15, 2007

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    a powerful poem, between rigid lines
    elequently done, as a sonnet defines
    a wonderful song, prefect ryhme note
    sung like an angel, a poem you wrote!
    rudolf


  • frankey
    July 15, 2007
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    I have never seen anything so beautiful. This is absolutely mind-blowing, well done.


  • Dalaney gold member
    July 15, 2007

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    What does it feel like
    to be such a poetic genius?
    I cannot imagine...This is
    amazing in that the poem flowed
    like cool water, never once
    interrupted by the repetition
    of first and last word. Bravo,
    darling...

    Love, Lane


    • Amera gold member
      July 16, 2007
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      Thanks Lane. Your comments are so spevial to me. I love uou!


      Love,
      Amera ♥

  • C. G. Sheahan
    July 15, 2007

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    I'm glad to see that there are still people out there other than myself that write sonnets. I appreciate this. I also appreciate your ability to compose a decent sonnet or sonnetesque poem. Keep up the good work

  • A Prophet of 3 gold member
    July 15, 2007

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    this would honestly be a rather intelligent piece of work in a very unique form ... although without trying to understand its confined dance ... to make it beauty as none has ever done before ... it could use a bit of a correct use of a word's touch (play, but embrace the rules ... since we are all fucked by their language and trivial rules) ... anyway ... i liked it ... *cheers*


    • Amera gold member
      July 16, 2007
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      Thank you, I know how hard it is to get a positive comment from you so I'm honored.


  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    July 15, 2007
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    wel i dont totally understand it but nice work i love the pic with it good luck in ur contest


  • And Hyetal
    July 15, 2007

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    Amazing!!! A new poetic form you've created! Okay, the first and last word being the same in each line seemed a little repetative, but it wasn't too bad. As with each new form, you've just got to work out the bugs.

    "You now have returned, I knew it was you." This line really spoke to me. Not sure why, but I could feel the love for the person in this line.

    Keep on writing; I'll keep on reading!

    Always,
    Cassie

    • C. G. Sheahan
      July 15, 2007
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      A new poetic form? It's a bloody sonnet. ABAB, CDCD, EFEF, GG. Come on, now.


      • Amera gold member
        July 15, 2007
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        I guess I did well, the entire shadow went over your head.


  • Mezclita
    July 15, 2007

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    Amazing write... a hopeful story that was so strong in itself, I hardly noticed the subtle word repetition in each line.
    "Love lies in my spirit, for you my love.
    Theft of your presence is not spirit theft.
    Above all my dreams, I hold you above"... fav part right there


  • Tercil gold member
    July 15, 2007

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    Exquisite expedia of motives, wisdom and compelling desire to be where you are, at the top of many's list of popular poets, and that goes deep in my heart to treasure. This would be an exceptional admission to the classics.

  • ladyscribe
    July 15, 2007

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    emotive

    I especially liked the sandpaper dreams, a sweetness tempered with a touch of roughness, certainly mirrors life.


  • hoodoolover silver member
    July 14, 2007

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    Awesome, I love this shadow sonnet form, I have never seen one before either, so if you have invented this... it's brilliant!


  • Desire gold member
    July 13, 2007

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    Holy Moly!!

    Is there anything You cannot do~
    Geeeeeeeeeeeeeesh
    Form Queen

    This reads and soothes the conscious with a
    Journey of gentle Beauty!
    Love it!

    You goooooooooood
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Phannie
    July 13, 2007

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    aNOTHER BEAUTIFUL poem..Yes it is i love the ending what a great way to say your ending. Great poem, your a wonderful writter keep doing what you do.

  • womansman
    July 13, 2007

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    All hail the form queen!

    Once again you have graced us with your beautiful mind and elegant charm. This is a wonderful poem... Spirit to Spirit indeed... look into the mirror and see the grand reflection of a great poem and friend. Your words crafted into art for the ages!


  • Kiran silver member
    July 13, 2007

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    This is excellent!!! An amazing form which is so cleverly done. The poem was beautiful!


  • maa gold member
    July 13, 2007

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    this is such a beautiful poem ...
    shadow sonnet, ha ? you just created a new form !
    so graceful and filled with love and gratitude ... whoever these words are offered to, he/she will be truly blessed through your love ...


    maa


  • Whoochi gold member
    July 13, 2007

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    ~~~This, not only the intriguing gorgeous for, but the sentiment expressed here of worth leaves me in awe...I feel not worthy.....but you press me to be all that i can be...you are MY DOLLFACE 4 ever...


  • soulfultia gold member
    July 12, 2007

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    You really did an outstanding job on this Sonnet! You create magnificent imagery and such an inviting write with a smooth flow and powerful penning! Excellent work, thank you so much for sharing your talent! My pleasure to read ~Tia

  • PerVirtuous
    July 12, 2007

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    It is moments like this that make AllPoetry such a wonderful place. Forget the quality of the form and the artfullness of the word placement. Those things, although fantastic in themselves, pale in comparison to the power of the image. You have created a work that carries the depth of your feeling, which I know to be amazing, and captures it in truth and accuracy for the world to share. That is no small achievement! I am humbled and awed. Just when I think I couldn't love you any more...


    Three Bunnies. Guess what their names are?


  • Never Fall in Love
    July 12, 2007
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    This ... damn, I have no words for this.
    This is one extraordinary peice of writing.
    If anyone has to learn about form poetry, I'd have to direct them to you. So that they can read your poems and have the best examples in front of them while they write.
    This is just amazing, my love.

    NeveR ♥

    • Amera gold member
      July 12, 2007

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      Thanks Sis, did I send you the wrong poem? I thought I sent you "The Room". That's the dark one.


      Love,
      Amera ♥

      • Never Fall in Love
        July 12, 2007

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        Nope, you sent the right link... I had this opened and read it a long time ago, but before I could comment, I had to go upstairs for a while, so yea.


  • HaleyMary
    July 12, 2007

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    This is a beautiful sonnet. I didn't even notice that each line began and ended with the same word until I read it in the author notes. Very clever write. Best of luck in the contest.

  • Eulb kcalB
    July 12, 2007

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    Lovely piece Amera. I love the way you let your emotion flow through each line. This piece here leaves the reader feeling riveted and moved , so much so that in my case I long for what I know is impossible...smiling

    Fantastic work here my friend

    love
    J


    • Amera gold member
      July 12, 2007
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      Thank you for the lovely comment and applause.


  • sunny day
    July 12, 2007

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    Amera, You have come up with another wonderful new form. What a lovely idea to create the shadow on the sonnet. There are a few authors here that always leave me in awe and you are one of them. You have done it again. Your mind is so intriguing as you are constantly thinking of new ways to make poetry even more wonderful than it already is. Thank you for sharing this idea with all of us and I will have to bookmark this one. Love you my friend, Joyce

    P.S. I was going on and on about the new form and forgot to tell you the sonnet itself is beautiful. I am a sucker for love and romance so this took hold of my heartstrings from start to finish.

    • Amera gold member
      July 12, 2007
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      Thanks so much Joyce. As one of the best form writers on the site I was hoping you would read it. You make poetry so much fun for me.

      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • PoetsAngel
    July 12, 2007

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    Once again I find myself sitting
    here with my mouth wide open,
    staring at the screen in total
    awe at something you have created.

    Simply beautiful


    Love
    Cathy
    xxooxx


    • Amera gold member
      July 12, 2007
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      Thanks Sis! Your words always bring a warm glow to my face. I had fun with this


      Love,
      Amera ♥


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    July 12, 2007

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    I like very much the spin you have put on this sonet, with the addition of a "shadow". Breathtakingly beautiful!


  • Faeryn
    July 12, 2007

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    wow, Amera this is amazing!! do you create poetry in your sleep as well when your awake? or do you just dream of lines being filleds with words and imagery?


    • Amera gold member
      July 12, 2007
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      aww... you're sweet! Yea I do dream in poetry. lol, wierd huh?

      Love,
      Amera ♥

  • myrataal silver member
    July 12, 2007
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    Amera ...

    This is typical the soul of a poet aware ... I am in awe. Do you always write in such a textured style? Yes, of course I can but applaud.

    Love, from the fairest Cape of them all.

    Myra


  • StarEyes
    July 12, 2007

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    And The FORM QUEEN is at it again! What a great job on this one!!!! Ihave never seen this before, but I love it!!!!! Best of luck in this contest!!!

    Love ya my friend

    Nyetta


  • RedAquarius
    July 12, 2007

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    "sandpaper dreams" - great imagery fragment there!
    This is amazing and unique. I especially liked the first stanza.

  • Tercil gold member
    July 12, 2007
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    Exquisites richly reknown

    Excellent piece this, the thief, be more a sentiment of worth that what is not and the presentation this has over all is nothing like I've ever read before. Excellent piece of literature.


    • Amera gold member
      July 12, 2007
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      Thanks Tony

      I smile: I know I did well when you comment. You only comment on my good ones.


      Love,
      Amera &heart;

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