This tastes just like the perfect tragedy,
With it's bittersweet butterfly kisses.
This feels as if she's on the verge of self-destruction,
Because it's you she always reminisces.
Perfectly outlined scars only make her weaker,
After another pixie dust adrenalin rush.
Crying won't ever bring him back baby,
This love was nothing but a mere crush.
Oh, what the beautiful disaster she became,
Mascara lined with glitter stains her face.
Torn and broken with such glamour,
Is it hard to recognise her;; when she's all over the place?
Nothing lasts forever just like each breathe she takes,
Taste the lies dripping from his overused lips.
Kiss away the scars left behind by burnt skin,
Crash into him just to feel the grinding of your hips.
Does it feel right to be highly medicated?
Didn't someone think to prescribe a wake up call.
A pretty little junkie with nothing else to lose.
Pick her up just to watch her crash down;; she'll fall.
Back to the days where size 0 jeans were everything,
Dumpster drugs tasted sweeter then the necture of his sin.
Perfection ruled her life whilst religion faded away,
Found the exact moment to take the posion;; she's given in.
Dead at the scene with the needle in her arm,
Such the perfect enemy carefully crafting her sweet demise.
A ring through her lip with more to stop the pain,
The perfect little smile and little lies framed her eyes.
Three worded lies fed to her almost had her awestruck,
ILoveYou [IMissedYou] MeantToBe were the choices.
Heartbreak never looked so gorgeous to anyone,
Shouldn't have listened to such selfish little voices.
Paranoia doesn't make friends when your im[perfect],
Phobias of being alone kept her injecting pixie dust.
Lies strangled her body tightly within it's grasp,
The demand for a little dust became a must.
She was more than a perfect little mistake,
The sweetest kind of tragedy;; that you'll never get to taste.
Ended her oh so beautiful pixie dust life to be labelled a teenage junkie,
Such the pretty little darling;; such a gorgeous face to waste.
Author notes
I had no idea this poem would end up this, perfect. I really like it for some reason.
Is about me pretty much.
-It's that time again..Yes, OPTIONS CONTEST!-
1-Cutting - It can be gory, it can swear, but I don't want every other word to be FxCK.
2-Eating Disorders - Bulimia, Anorexia...Binge eating.
4-Depression. Make me feel your pain. Hardcore.
I went to the grocery shop to buy a chocolate bar but instead brought home a man. Lol.
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holy fucking mother of....
Perfect. I agree.
This is amazing.
Seriously.
After this contest is over, and I find out who you really are, I'm so totally reading a TON more of your poetry.
♥BD9♥
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Thanks a bunch..
this was one of the last good peices i wrote before i had months of writers block.
glad u liked it.
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"Is it hard to recognise her;; when she's all over the place?" - "recognise" would be "recognize". I do not understand the usage of the semi-colon twice after the word "her".
"Nothing lasts forever just like each breathe she takes," - I believe there should be a comma after "forever", I could be wrong. Also, "breathe" would be "breath".
"Pick her up just to watch her crash down;; she'll fall." - again: I do not understand the double semi-colon.
"Found the exact moment to take the posion;; she's given in." - again: I do not understand the double semi-colon. Also, "posion" would be "poison".
"Paranoia doesn't make friends when your im[perfect]," - "your" would be "you're" as in "you are im[perfect],".
"The sweetest kind of tragedy;; that you'll never get to taste." - again with the semi-colon which even if it were just the one semi-colon, it wouldn't go there. That's one line.
You again have the double semi-colon at the end of the piece. Perhaps it's a "tm", and if it is, doesn't work for me.
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The semi colons were there for show, and I'm not changing them just because you aren't liking them.
The spelling, pfft. Nobody is perfect and i'd prefer spelling mistakes over perfection. =]
Thanks for your comment though.
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a finalist well deserved. this has to be the most emotion-packed poem in the contest. Congrats!!!
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omg
theres so much of this that im like in love with
if i were to copy them into this comment
i'd pretty much be copying the whole thing
welcome to the finalists list
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Good luck
thanks for following the rules
keep writing!!!
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♥
PaintedParisPassion
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Thankyou =]
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Very sad but very true. Sometimes when we believe we are truly in love, we are the ones lying to ourselves even more. Very wonderfully penned, with great vocabulary and an interesting topic. Sad, as well as dark, this tale needs to be told to many before they make these mistakes themselves [as we often conceal and don't want to notice the truth] but it's there alright. Well presented. x
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Back to the days where size 0 jeans were everything,
Dumpster drugs tasted sweeter then the necture of his sin.
Perfection ruled her life whilst religion faded away,
Found the exact moment to take the posion;; she's given in.
I love that part...even though it was pretty hard to read with tears streaming down my face!
I love ya cazza!
Re read your letter if you ever doubt that!
*hugs for you*
xo
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*hugz*
I'm not rereading your letter since it makes me cry as i said in my message yesterday
xoxo
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Nothing lasts forever just like each breathe she takes,
Taste the lies dripping from his overused lips.
Kiss away the scars left behind by burnt skin,
Crash into him just to feel the grinding of your hips.
Does it feel right to be highly medicated?
Didn't someone think to prescribe a wake up call.
A pretty little junkie with nothing else to lose.
Pick her up just to watch her crash down;; she'll fall.
OMG ... THIS HAS TO BE THE BEST POEM I'VE READ IN A VERY LONG TIME ... YOU REALLY DID A WONDERFUL JOB WITH THIS ... IT'S BEAUTIFULLY PENNED ... AND THOSE TWO STANZAS ARE BY FAR THE BEST IN THE ENTIRE PIECE ... NOT THAT THE PIECE A WHOLE WAS BAD ... BECAUSE TRUST ME ... IT WAS VERY BEAUTIFUL ... AND SAD NONETHELESS ... YOU HAVE HIT HOME ON THIS ... AND I AM TRULY AMAZED ... VERY WELL DONE HONEY ... SO FULL OF EMOTION ... AND YOU REALLY DID A MARVELOUS JOB.
MUCH LUV
SMILE, IT CONFUSES PEOPLE
SPARKEH
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Thanx.. I'm glad you liked it.
It's about myself... pixie dust meaning drugs.
Yep.
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