You stated love
though didn't show
your words turned sour
(I CAN FEEL)
they stung.
My ears
My heart
-it knew better-
then to let you
get the best.
Even if I held on
I held back
thats why I am still standing.
We could have made it
been amazing
I would have loved you
until my last breath
but you broke it
so I broke up
cause you hurt
at your first shot.
As I made excuses
I knew
I never deserved it
neither did you
my kisses were too sweet
my words too true
I gave you me
you held back you
I had my hopes up but-
consequences
of action
happened
alone
apart
But I won't give in again.
you have ruined us.
A contest entry
- Still don't know what love is.... by flyingphoenix.
850 points, ended July 15, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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It#s hard to be in a relationship where you feel yourself giving more than the other half. You captured that very well here, without making it sound to 'I love him more than he loves me'!!!
A great write, with some great lines in there. I particualy liked the second stanza, it shows whilst you were willing to give yourself, you knew what was happening.
A great write, thank you for entering and good luck!!!
webber
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