little child i love to watch you so,
there are some things you need to know
if i could tell you just one thing
my guidance for you is forever promising
i'm young and learning as just you'll be
if i stumble and fall i dont want you to see
theres things about me you mustn't know
in those moments, i'll have to go
you're going to crawl and sometimes fall
your eyes will gleem trust to all
and you'll learn that life is happy sometimes
blinded to filth and all of life's crimes
little child, i'm excited for you
you have my love, and assurance too
if you fall i'll be right there
and if i'm busy, still know i care
only one chance is given to us
use it wisely, and spare your trust
be cautious, be independent, and do not cry
never give up, you must always try
i love you dearly with all my heart
all who love you will show you a good start
you have this chance i never found
when you need me, i'm here, lurking around
to protect you
A contest entry
- letter to a baby by CarCrashHumor.
600 points, ended August 11, 2007, 35 entries
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"little child, i'm excited for you
you have my love, and assurance too
if you fall i'll be right there
and if i'm busy, still know i care
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that is something to cherish -
woot
so sweet! made me smile ^^ -
This is a very interesting piece. The title suggest something completely different, something a little darker. Its interesting how a love that is pure and instinctive can sometimes seem creepy or dark. But it's true, mothers have a habit of lurking where their kids are involved. Chances are when I have my babies, I'll be a bit of a lurker too. Love makes people do some very odd things sometimes. Brava
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delightfully loving words
love this very one with life experience thinking of the child first steps and knowing whats ahead I felt this for my children enjoyed reading this very much its very true isn't it amen
Love Pauline
keep up the strenght for them
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"i'm young and learning as just you'll be
if i stumble and fall i dont want you to see
theres things about me you mustn't know
in those moments, i'll have to go"
That's EXACTLY how I felt due my pregnancies. And these lines: "if you fall i'll be right there
and if i'm busy, still know i care" That's how I wish all mothers are. That'd be the most amazing thing to see.
I think the title is a little creepy, but that's most likely due to the pessimist in me. Great write, the ending is the best.
Best of luck in the contest,
Bandaid.
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yeah, i called it that due to the situation of the one who requested the contest, i thought it might be fittingly for the contest holder, and hope they will enjoy the rest as well. but glad u liked the poem and thanks for reading, Love
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awwwww so cute i love this ... good luck in the contest ... xxx cheeky xxx
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