Let’s take a step back from our incessant bustling
in order to notice little things that enrich our lives-
there, at our feet, are examples of which still
tug tease and get tangled from their paws to their eyes
licking and nudging, pawing and running-
each reminding us of what we've lost inside…
Far back in a dim past, so long ago now
under much younger suns, stars, moons and clouds
reason but crawled in our young species’ mind
rare was the desire for more than we'd gather,
yearned for moments together, cherished in time…
As we advanced, got caught up in progress
not all of our instincts remained intact-
in small furry animals, we have here to remind us
mistakes can be made, no matter how fast
all of this progress seems to have advanced our lives;
let us pause to remember pure-hearted wisdom that
still resides near in four-footed disguise.
In a list
A contest entry
- Acrostic Only~ My goodbye to AP(Temporary?) by misticmoonlite.
2100 points, ended July 14, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Love this!
Surprised this only garnered an HM 'cause it's 
I'm a lover of Acrostics & you did this one mightily!
You packed this full of imagery, thoughtful content & vividness!
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well, I sure appreciated the look at this one- I saw that it needed a good overhaul...! (nothing like a pair of eyes to get me to give a piece a going-over... a prime benefit of AP, the 'eyes'!) although 'improved' isn't always the outcome with rewriting- it's a dangerous undertaking- freshness, energy, and spirit may be lost... though I know that this piece benefited- I straightened out a few points I tried to (but didn't quite) make originally...so a few stars for you for that...
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Didn't realize this was an acrostic till I saw the contest title - oft the first letters of each line are capitalized so one can see the letters as they go down and spell the word - the title of the poem. Interesting the way you have done this and then indented the line that does not act as part of the word. Nice HM to boot.
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awe, thanks! If I ever present it, that it is an acrostic will probably precede it, and actually, I probably forgot it was an acrostic myself!
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aw this is so sweet
I know of those little critters, then can be fun,funny
and run like crazy,lol good job on this and enjoy the trips/lol thank you for entering this into my contest good luck...mm
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