At sunset's beginning
Tears, sharpened with hatred and despair
Spilled across the sky, as fallen stars
And soon they saw, I was unaware
Until my sight turned to the right
It was then, I realized torture
Never could I, have seen torment
How could this become stilled fortune
Across the desperate seas of fate
I sat and gazed out at the water
Thinking of agony beyond words
Now I have lost my mother
It was a while before I was told
Because everyone feared for my response
But not a single one knew
When I was lost to hopelessness
Yellow rays of death
Poor across her expressionless face
My heart stops beating in my chest
As my addreniline begins to race
My mother died in that accident
As well as my little brother
His body was cut apart
It could have been any other
Fourteen years old
Lost his life
When he had great goals
Through his struggle and strife
The cruelest excuse for a father
As everybody knows
We all see his selfishness
As this pathetic fool is exposed
While he grows greedier by the second
He must be dazed, thinking he's royal
He decides he's gonna fire the only lawyer
That to me will be truely loyal
Doing what she can for me
She is on my side
Being their to watch my back
No matter how much they try
He thinks he is coy and clever
If only he could see
Of all the ruthless things
That could and came from me
Tomorrow, during break
I will borrow a co workers phone
And while sitting out by Dollar General
Discuss the quickest way for me to be alone
Before he knows what's gonna hit him
He looks around confused
Trying so hard to figure out whats happening
But not see the world he's gonna lose
Out on my own, living well
Not much in the living room
Furniture a far cry from great
But it will all be better soon
Down the innerstate, without worry
Our luggage sitting in the back
Sooner than you can even blink an eye
We'll be in Indiana just like that
Guy won't have a clue
We'll be about twenty miles away
And what is that bastard gonna do
When he sees that he ain't gettin paid
Author notes
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It isnt exactly as you asked for, but it's the trouble and struglle that I am going through. My mom and my little brother died in a car accident in february and I was utterly crushed, but I never let anyone see that except on the night of the accident.. I was so tore up..
Well, my 'father' doesnt care about the accident or about me. He lives in Indiana, I am in Texas. He is a fucking disgrace. Greedy to the bone. He calls down here all the time and never says he loves me or asks me how im doing.. the only thing he asks me is about the money case from the car accident.
He has decided to fire my lawyer but hasnt done it yet, so, I have time to call her up at work tomorrow and see about quickly getting emancipated. Guy's dumb ass hasnt set a legal guardian for me in texas. I am almost 17 and my only legal guardian is in Indiana and I am a residence of Texas without a care giver or guardian of any kind. I have a job and pay for all of my stuff, including hygiene products; shampoo, conditioner, body soap, deoderant, tooth brush, tooth paste, etc. As well as make my own car payment, pay my own phone bill, and by my own food. It can be done fast as shit.. and Guy wont have any say over me anymore and I can live legally by myself! Actually not by myself, I will be living with my boyfriend and he is going to move to Indiana with me next year!
Im pretty sure you know now what my poem was about and it made sense to you.. that is a long description!
A contest entry
- Life Sucks (rounds contest) by SoftlyScreaming.
600 points, ended July 12, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Amazing Piece!!!
If anything this tragic ever happened to me, i could write about it- but not in such beauty and grace that you have done!
"At sunset's beginning
Tears, sharpened with hatred and despair
Spilled across the sky, as fallen stars
And soon they saw, I was unaware"
Beautiful, great imagery!
Usually I despise long(er) poetry, but this one was so full of emotion and power and ability that I read the whole thing, then went back to read it again and make sure I didn't miss anything.
Great Job!
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wow... this broke me inside.. it just tore me up.. you really have a way of writing your emotions and putting into detail what happened.. you are an amazing writer, and the things going on in your life- if you ever need to talk about them feel free to write me because i will listen.. im here, ill probably always be here, im just worried about you now..
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