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The Artistic Binge Starts Here

I. Newsflash

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a ton of bricks hit our freshman heads
in the form of a brilliant binge artistry,
and we drew blanks
without lifting a single utensil,

too preoccupied with
being spoon-fed the spice of life,

never realizing how small we were
between the crevices
of a certain dimmed limelight.

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II. In Which I Speak For The Majority of Artists

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feel free to lend me your ears --
that is, if you don't want them back
for a long while.

it was a sketchbook romance,
we've all felt this lust as often
as we felt the Ticonderoga granite slip
cleanly through our fingers, leaving
behind

ideas, the skin pulled drum-tight
over the right-brained womb,
a barely fetal scribble, embryo-doodle
winding up DOA between our fingers.

it was the work of hands, more hands,
and suspended animation.

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III. Applause I Don't Deserve

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even when her muse died nightly
in a screaming silence --
really, now, she had to give it
the Prodigal Artist Try
that yielded crude figures

crude figures
and -- for a change of pace --

crude figures.

minutes away, the mind-womb contracts
and even the mistakes are perfect.
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IV: Famous Last Words

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Mother, let me inherit your patience.
I'm sure you were a Prodigal Artist, too,
before hope sprung eternal
and you spent your days trying to plug it up.

Author notes

teen idol

about my inadequacy when it comes to art, and how my friend is just brilliant and how everything comes to her in that area.

if you read "Stumped," this is the same person we're talking about.

But that's only an opinion in my mind. I'm STILL trying to convince myself we're on the same level.
And to no avail.

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  • Tangled Angle
    July 12, 2007

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    90.5

    You ideas are brilliant, imagery is great. You did an great job with everything, besides the line breaking, and I didn't understand some parts.

    Originality: 10
    Creativity: 10
    Organization of ideas: 9
    Line- breaking/flow: 7
    Use of poetic devices/rhyme: 9
    Development/consistency of ideas: 9
    Catchy title: 10
    Title contrasts w/ poem well: 10
    Poem makes sense: 8
    Enjoyable: 8.5

    Total: 90.5