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What is This?

The rain
It's the greatest thing that nature ever created
For some, it helps them go to sleep
For others it hides the tears that they cry
For me, it's the best part of the day

I can go and cry in it
I could dance in it, 

Let it wash away everything I've ever done

But now all it reminds me of is him

 

We used to walk in the rain

Just laugh at everyone who screamed when they got wet

And that's where he died

Is in the rain

 

If the man who drove the car wasn't drunk

If he didn't take that corner as fast as he did

If he'd checked the brakes before hand

He wouldn't have slid out of control

 

I guess I can't blame the man for everything

If I noticed it earlier, and pushed him out of the way

He would still be here

Holding my hand

 

Everytime it rains

It's because he's crying

He's happy for me

And he's watching

 

Everytime it rains

I go out and dance

I go out and sing

...just like we used to

 

 

 

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mehj name is Payne (aka Avalon)

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  • takemypainaway
    March 11, 2008

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    good poem

    i too love the rain

    it seems like you had some fun in the rain


    thank you for entering!!

    **kat


  • sweetgirlwa
    March 8, 2008
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    This is captivating! It starts out as a wonderful image of frolicking in the rain and then pounds you with the reality that faces so many, the pain that rain can sometimes bring. I say to the person in the rain~continue to dance and sing, it brings joy to all. Great work


  • Imaginary-2-you
    January 19, 2008
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    This poem rocks...you know in a sad way


  • celestial
    July 29, 2007

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    : )

    This was very nice. Thjanks for sharing. It was nice how you said when it rains, he's crying tears of happiness for you.


  • MourningSun
    July 20, 2007

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    That is a really sad poem... It was beautiful though and I enjoyed reading it. As i enjoy saying, it was beautifully tragic.


  • Dark Angel Reborn
    July 20, 2007

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    This piece is really really touching. It didnt flow very well though, (Free verse should still flow..its a poem) But i think if you went back and worked on this, it would be a completely AMAZING piece. Great Job. I loved it.


  • Deijinn
    July 16, 2007
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    this is my fav

    this is my favorite because I was very proud of this write and it reminds me to protect the ones I love


  • On Frail Wings.
    July 12, 2007
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    wow i hope this never really happened, that would be so sad...well nice write and good luck i love the rain too and it reminds me of people

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