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Mommas' Glass Six Pack ~ ~ ~ ~ ~

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Twister drawing its' breath off shingles from our reside,

sister on one hip, six pack on the other, momma held on to her pride ~

 

The air around us swirled, blowing chickens like the dickens,

horses running wildly, dog still chained to porch yelping, this time no whippins ~

 

The finger of God was upon us, taking a turn for a drink,

into the pond its' thirsty mouth did sip, there goes the kitchen sink ~

 

Momma pushed my sister into the cellar, my hair mangled in my face,

slipping and falling on the fresh morning dew, running at a good pace ~

 

Six bottles of booze falling to the ground, momma stopped to cease,

inside the storm box, for momma I would hollar, then praying upon my knees ~

 

Through the clothesline the funnel did blow, tossing white sheets away,

a wheel barrow had flipped, hitting momma, blood now on the blowing hay ~

 

Amongst the commotion we could hear windows shatter and break,

ripping our home to shreds, throwing our truck into the nearby lake ~

 

Momma had fallen, the winds blew and blew,

trying to gather her bottles, I watched her, as she watched me too ~

 

Closing the doors to our safe haven, my mind was in wonder,

my sister and I sat quietly and still, the storm was now just thunder ~

 

The house was gone, my dogs chain snapped in two,

momma was not coming back for us, this I knew to be true ~

 

My sister Susie and I walked over shards of glass, stepping on a big nail,

the only thing that was untouched, was mommas glass six pack,

 

still standing tall and mighty, right where she had fell ~

Author notes

This is not a true story,

yet I wonder just how many Alcoholics would

go back into the storms fury to get that last drink ~

 

Well, I can tell you from experience.....

 

.....there was no storm strong enough,

to keep this Alcoholic from my booze ~

 

Sobriety date:

 

August 25th, 2003

 

I thank the Good Lord above,

because without sobriety,

I am nothing ~

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  • FisherCat
    August 10, 2007

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    Fantastic!!!

    OMG!!! The wind is blowing, the rain is pounding, heaven has called down the thunder, but man I've got to have that last Pepsi.....

    What an awesome job! The read was sooooo picture perfect, actually reminded me of the Wizard of Oz! This was truly an outstanding read! When are you gonna write your first movie script? Or is this it? hehe. Anyways you have done a fabulous job, keep your pen forever flowing my dear brother!


    Brother Cat


  • StarEyes
    August 10, 2007

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    Uncle Bear,

    You always seem to post things in the reading room that I have already been on But once again, I am gonna say this is amazing! And if I give more clappie's I sure would!

    and much love

    Nyetta


  • Star Shine
    August 10, 2007

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    This is an awesome tale, and the rhyme adds a huge punch. The eye contact between the character and his mother is an inspired moment. Just brilliant. Your insight is arrow straight, working in the addictions field I know of many who would go back for their drug of choice, regardless of potential harm. Bravo.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    July 12, 2007

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    This is a many layered poem. Awesome! Glad that it is fictitious, but I agree that many might be going back for the booze. I think, and would hope, this could be an eye opening message for some! Congratulations on your sobriety! Thank you so much for entering and good luck.

    Jeannie


    • Arkbear gold member
      July 12, 2007
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      Jeannie ~

      Thank you for your review Hun ~

      I hope the message rings loud & clear as well ~

      Great contest...have fun Judging!

      SMILE!



      Bear ~

  • StarEyes
    July 11, 2007
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    My Dearest Uncle,

    This sent chills through me! You did a great job on it! This is amazing! Brought back some memories of the hurricanes I have been through, but not with alcohol involved. What a great read this one is! Congrats on your sobriety!!! Best of luck in this contest!

    and much love always

    Nyetta


  • Patpowers silver member
    July 11, 2007

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    Nice job again Arkbear!

    Congratulations on nearly four years of being alcohol free. Good work and a message to think about at the end of this. I thought this was a good testimony coming from you. THANKS again Arkbear!


  • tawk gold member
    July 11, 2007

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    Congrats on your sobriety I am so proud of you!!! Wow what a intense and gripping story! As always such wonderful imagery and emotion. The words of a true poet

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