Whenever Billy made childhood mistakes
The storm of his mother would build
She would grit her stained teeth, turn red and scream
Billy would cower; he knew what was coming
His mother would grab a metal spoon
The spoon would expel her anger
Billy was held by the arm as she would swing
Billy could feel his own anger building; numb to the pain
Afterwards, he could not sit down, hidden in his room
Billy was too scared to make a single sound
His sore legs made him dream of better places
Billy hoped, someday, he would be rescued
But no one came, he was helpless
On many occasions he succombed to her wrath
He was hurting, fearing and hoping
He had survived and he thought, I will never be her
Billy grabbed a rope and tied a knot
And attached it to the window
And when his mother tried to beat him again
She went hanging like a donkey, pinyada (sic)
The authorities came and Billy was arrested
He came clean and told his story
But the Police said it didn't matter
And he was sent to prison for life
A contest entry
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wow the end of this poem was very brutal...is this a true story may i ask?
you did a wonderful job with this poem and somebody really should have helped the kid out some...anyways thank you for entering and good luck in the contest!! -
I do wish parents would realize how much their actions does affect their childrens lives. Excellent write~ Well said! Nice job!
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powerful poem. i like it . you are a great wrighter. keep up the good work.
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Has this actually happened to you? I am sorry to hear someone, anyone, has been through this. This poem has a touching message that the world needs to pay attention to, although as a poem I think it could be more creative. For some people, meaning is more than the way it is presented. Good luck!
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Thank you for your kind comments. Do you have any suggestions, please? BTW, this has not happened to me -
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Well, one small suggestion I could make would be that I think you misspelled "she" in line 3. Other than that, I am unsure what to tell you. I suppose we just have different views on poetry. A way to touch me more would be to use more poetic devices to show how he felt and his story, but that is a mere personal preference. Many will be more touched by this style you have used because it can be easier to understand. Also, the way you tell what happened sounds to me a bit like a story. Have you ever written prose on this site?
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Yes, i wrote a short story, which is featured off of my profile on Storywrite.
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