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Gazing out the window as the sky weeps

She watches ;

slow tumble - drops of rain
 cascade from pane to cheek


back again

 

ever downward

 the corners of her lips

arched toward the pain 

 

her heart.

 

If she can't swim

in this desert of tears,

surely,

she will drown.

 

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  • leander Moderators member
    December 28, 2007
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    Short and to the points - that's how I like poetry in fact You have some great imagery too and a nice wordplay in your last stanza 'in this desert of tears' -> great metaphor!

    thanks for entering the contest, I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander


  • Sweet Sorrow
    July 11, 2007
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    Thank you for entering my contest. I wish you luck.