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Everything

Guitars
        Jack Johnson
    Crowd Surfing
                  John Deere
      Farming
                      Clear Blue Waters
                Blue Water Towers
  Bonfires
A Sweatshirt
              Cold Beer
              Aluminum Bottles
          Cigarettes
    Crisp Spring Nights
      Hot Summer Nights
*Fireworks*
    Texas Hold ‘Em
          Deer
  Ferris Wheels
                Writing Checks
  Basketball
Playgrounds
      Wal-Mart
      Awkward Hellos
        Worse Goodbyes


Everything reminds me
of
him.

They’ll say what they want
Call him what they wish

“Not good enough”
“Freeloader”

Go ahead – say what you will

But nothing can stop
This feeling in my heart
Nothing can stop me
From trying to figure out
What the ache
In the pit of my stomach
Has been trying to tell me

Author notes

I hate it right now but I haven't written in a long time and it's what's going through my head and it's all that I could get written...

I guess I don't absolutely hate it, but I wish I could have written something absolutely fantastic with the way I'm feeling... but I guess that won't be able to happen after not writing for about a year... woops.

Give me feedback - positive and negative... just please don't be too harsh on the actual material itsself... pretty touchy subject. Be harsh on form, how I wrote it, what I can make it better... don't tell me that it's a stupid topic and blah blah blah, please. cuz I don't want to hear that.

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Comments


  • wendy
    July 11, 2007
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    BTW. Don't be so modest. This is absolutely fanstastic.

  • wendy
    July 11, 2007
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    This has so much heart my dear. Please don't dismiss the beauty of being true to your feelings when it comes to life or to your writing. It's really inspiring. You allow the reader to feel your emotions and that's a hard thing to do. This is absolutely endearing.


  • DeepBreath
    July 11, 2007

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    Heartfelt

    I thought it was good, rambling is a constant form of the way I write so who cares if its not perfect, thoughts never are. It made sense to me. And I know what you mean when you say you wish you coulda written something fantastic, you feel so much that you want to write something beautiful like you feel but it never comes out good enough cuz we're too hard on ourselves. I thought it was good.