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Exit Sandman

She stirs insignificant swirls
in a sea of sacrifice,
awash on the waves of rebuttal
in misted emotional movements

and sandy eyed beaches dissolve

in dream endings

as castle walls crumble.

 

 

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  • Blue Rew silver member
    July 14, 2007

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    This is mood setting...
    wonderful metaphor use and I love
    the crumbling of walls and dreams.
    Blue


  • zochit2me gold member
    July 11, 2007
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    Perfect.
    Fits my mood
    Becky


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    July 11, 2007

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    A truly beautiful piece. Sounds like a write of experience.
    All the best with this beauty
    Gaylene

  • tara wilson gold member
    July 11, 2007
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    lol

  • tara wilson gold member
    July 11, 2007

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    "and sandy eyed beaches dissolve
    in dream endings
    as castle walls crumble."...wonderful.
    lol...I like the title...exit sandman...I like that song enter sandman.
    Thank you for your entry


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    July 10, 2007
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    Just lovely sad poetry, written to perfection.

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