All music my Mairéad (Megan) Murphy...that would be me, haha.
This poem follows http://www.mediafire.com/?tgmutmmaxwd
The music to "In Autumn" (Right click and choose 'open in new window')
(Bass Clarinet)
Here’s a tale we have locked away
Safe for a dreaming…day
(Clarinet)
From the trees, like the night, came forth a shadow
Charming poems of love and magick he spoke…of
(Orchestra)
Here in time, he holds clocks, ones chained ‘n silver
Bringing seasons and change upon her eyes.
(Piano)
Here, glancing at autumn
She waits in all time’s change
Hoping the leaves glow red
Dead, to the ground they fall
(Harp)
Here I am, waiting for, magick of forests
For his words, tears and snow adorn my heart
(Cello)
Dear my love, tied to time you’ve come here dreaming
He has chained you to night, you no longer…sleep
(Harp)
Here, lost in the singing trees
I dwell in the shadows
Once that this lover shows
Should these leaves glow red
(Cello)
Autumn love, ‘tis a day, closer to winter
There’s not one song to sing where the leaves glow…red
(Violins and Harp)
Weeks have passed with the sleeping trees
Bound in time’s gown I will dance for this scene
(Cello)
Dear, he is untrue
I speak of love’s lighter side
Love, won’t you take my hands?
To a cloudless sky, thus we will fly high
Dreaming of the silver, no black shadow’s demand
The angels wish by
(Harp)
In your eyes, is a tree, growing with olives
Peaceful dreams, write a page in the autumn...book
(Cello)
Take my heart, to your eyes, good for dreams to bed
In my hands, do the leaves, glow a gentle red?
(Take a break; the poem re-enters when the drums stop)
(Harp)
Nightmares have plagued me since
But blooms ‘n trees take me there
To a cloudless glimpse
On which we ride air
Darkness love, is a clock, it’s chained ‘n silver
I will take to thee, what shadows failed to
(Piano)
See, life in the forest
Love, stops all worldly time
Thus, the autumn bore us
Leaves, of red aglow
(Anticipate the words; the music slows down a lot!)
In autumn, here on a…dreaming…day
Author notes
Think of the orchestra as an all-knowing chours...like in Greek treatre! ^_^
Then the ensemble (Harp and Cello) are the characters...okay so it isn't a Greek tragedy...but follow me!
Then think of the Piano part at the very end as the all-knowing chours too.
There are several places where the last word of the phrase carries over into the first beat of the next measure where a new phrase begins. ..kind of like the characters are interupting each other...how rude..haha..just kidding...the interuption have the (...)
Okay...let me pull out a few things from here...because we all know how school kids choke up on symbolism in literature and all that jazz.
This whole glowing leaf business...well...In autumn right before the leaves fall off the trees they're red...or some purple...don't get smart with me...and then they die and fall of the tree...all brown and...well...dead. So the use of the colour red in this is like a last string of hope for love and life...red being a colour that symbolizes both. The harp...excuse me...young lady, falling in love with darkness is trying to find love in the shadows to keep this final string of love...so the leaves will glow red...so they keep on living...much like her love.
But of course we know evil and shadows and all that malevolent stuff wouldn't keep her love alive...the leaves will die.
Then comes the cello...excuse me...boy...who really loves her and wishes to save her from this darkness.
Then there's the clock, chained 'n silver...which is just a symbol of time and season's chaning...it's a binding force (the chains)that keeps her waiting for the shadows to come all through the season's passing...time strains her with nightmares and sleepless nights...symptoms of a lover lost.
When she responds to the boy... the leaves keep their colour because time stops.
(See, life in the forest
Where, love stops all worldly time
Thus, the autumn bore us
Leaves, of red aglow)
Blah, blah, time stopped so the leaves don't die...so her love lives on blah blah with this boy...blah, blah...my imagination's crazy...blah.
Now for the contest in which this is entered...there is no real chours or verse but there are melodies, counter melodies, refrains, and harmonies...so to make it not so "sticky" I just put what instrument to follow.
In a list
A contest entry
- [Contest] Getting Lyrical by Goldmare.
600 points, ended August 16, 2007, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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The elegance of this piece is simply wonderful...
I would love to hear this played..
Beautiful work..
Peace
~A~
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Thanks for another awesome comment...
Thanks for comment stalking me? Haha...just kidding... -
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LOL...Stalking..No I just enjoy beautiful poetry..
I shall save the stalking for others..
hehe..
Peace
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Haha...be careful...stalking is risky buisness.
Well, since you've taken the time to read a bunch of my stuff...I'm going to stop by your page.
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Ah~ This is quite lovely. I like the unique lyrics. The actual feel of the song and music work together nicely.
There were parts that felt a tad awkward (you totally lost me for the "Violins and Harp" stanza), but overall the timing was pretty good. I really like the feel to it overall, and all the metaphors, even though I don't quite understand them, add a certain... something, which I love.
I also like how the girl and boy each have different instruments for their voices. A nice touch. ^_^ Wonderful!
Thanks for the entry!
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Thank you for the awesome commment and the awesome winnings...
Let me guess where else you got lost...
Where the piano played...am I right? Sometimes I still lose it there...haha... -
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Lol. Well, it wasn't too bad. Just, sometimes I'd end up leaving the last word of a line off so that I'd start the next one on time. ^^;
And you're welcome!
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OH MY GODDDDDD!! THEIR ARE NO WORDS!! YOU are blowing my mind!I want to come and live in your brain! I can't comment because I'm speechless. How ever you spend your day must be total boredom compared to what going on in your head.I can't believe this!!! You should dedicate all your time to the eminence talent that the good Lord has given you,I see a rich future as an artist for you.
You should be doing something right now with all of this talent.....I'm blown away....your loved ones should be very proud of you. If you were my daughter i would be in the taverns boasting and proud as hell.....truly wonderful dose not even touch the way i feel about this write and your overall talent.You should be in the Grand old opry in Belfast!
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Thank you...well...writing songs is something I've been doing just recently...for about a year...I would listen to those flying cello melodies at night as I tried to sleep and words just came to them.
Now...what I do outside my head isn't boring...haha...but I know what you mean...I do however...use my imagination to make mundane activities fun.
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Very nice
This would be a great song I dont have any way to truly hear it but it goes in a full round of life
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Daaaa! I was leaning in to hear the clarinet, and then the orchestra knocked me out of my chair with a sonic blast! Love and stuff, yes... I would specify 'new' love, for there are phases, much like the moon...
OK, now the nitpicky stuff (oops, I mean constructive criticism!) The melody for the first line does't match the first line's syllabic word structure- the words are bent all out of shape to match! Hmmm... I guess it's just the word 'story', with that long pause between 'sto' and 'ry'... and the long dwelling on 'have', maybe a comma there, and commas to make clear other pauses where needed... a magic tinkering wand would be handy for those kinds of situations... (sorry, you know I just saw Harry Potter!) I remember my first attempt at words/melody- I had many, many 'situations'... it becomes easier after a while... there are five notes for the three syllables in 'forever', and the word-syllable/melody pauses don't quite match in that line... OK, let me hold my tongue so I can listen all the way through once!
There is that one long note after 'kills her'... I wouldn't go 'kills here, DEAD' however! I think 'here on time' should be 'in time', as is it, it seems to place importance on her not having arrived late... I lost the melody/lyric connection in the first piano section's last two lines on first hearing, for there are many more notes than syllables... a slight bump in 'tastless treats'... then the word/melody connection in the 'gray sky' cello section lost me on first hearing... I think it was because there is a counter melody going on with the harp... oh, the last piano part runs away with the melody, don't know where the words end...
Well, quite tired now! At least now you can see my thought processes on such pieces!
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I'm still doing some word tinkering...hmm...sound familiar? I know there are some lines that I'm not happy with at all..grr...sorry about blasting you out of your chair...Mwhahaha! Exactly my intention! There are some places in here that sound weird...sometimes because that just don't work and sometimes you just have to understand how I talk! As well as I know my English the accent is thick as honey...and in it the word story ALMOST sounds like one syllable...I read it out loud and go "this works!" Then in my head where by a miracle I can speak without it and then I say, "NOOO! Not again!" ...haha Don't worry...I AM still working on it...I have no ideas what to do with me bloody commas! "Her" in the beginning is right on the big fermata with the huge timpani roll...there's nothing after it...hmm...weird...
An understanding of my story would explain the symbols of the shadow and the clock and why it would actually kill her...you might go ??? But myself, knowing my story would go, "Of course!"
For following the piano parts (which I'm not 100 % with)...try not to get mixed in the left hand part...trust me...it's easy to do that...at the last piano section there isn't anything to the 32nd note run...after that run the music starts goes into a ritardando...that might help...haven't figured how I would note that in the poetry because not everyone on here is either a music or Italian wizard. (In reponse to your "just seen Harry Potter")
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