I feel the smooth knife carve its path through me,
Creating paths of blooded love.
Watch the blood seep from my heart,
Pumping its last remains of my love for you.
Bleeding on my floor,
Cleansing my soul of all love that I had for you.
I feel the burning sensation as my knife moves up my arm.
Love evaporates in to the darkness,
Leaving behind a shadow of sorrow.
As I lay in the silence,
Thinking about our love,
Your betrayal.
I cut harder,
Pushing out every part of me that ever loved you.
I was fooled by your charm,
And now I'm paying for it.
As the blood runs out,
I give one last secret smile,
Just as the last drops of blood creep over my whitened lips.
Author notes
option #6, ♥ dancing on your grave ♥
"Blood soaked smile"
"Watch the blood seep from my heart"
A contest entry
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Awsome I love how this poem expresses the emotions so well!! Outstanding sad and a little twisted!! But a great write none the less!!! YOu have a gift...a gift of talent! keep up the good work and feel free to check out my page anytime!
Jess
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wow, this poem is seriously wicked, twisted, a little bit too real... and awesome. Chose one, or all of the above and all that jazz. Anyways, away from the complete and utter randomness of that comment.
This poem, quite simply rocks!!!
and from reading this i feel inspired to read the rest ^_^
well done, your a great writer, write more, or less...
but remember, 'insanity is a virtue!'
or at least it should be
^_^ *smiles*
yours faithfully
-mike (the archangel michael de-angelae)
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deep and sadly hurting..the whole theme has a strngent feel that makes this so painful...love indeed makes us do wasteful things..dont they?...pri
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Wow, i really liked this. It was such a good write, and you used my quotes so well. (A lot of people didnt bother using them at all, which is fine...but you're more likely to win if you do ;-) Thanks for entering and goood luck to you
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Wow, this poem is awsome, good job!
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woah i really like this
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