My blood runs across the blackness,
Staining the purity of the night.
I feel the sharpness of the blade,
As it cuts deep in to my unbroken skin.
And if I bleed,
I bleed for you,
Knowing you won't return to me.
The prick of the knife is nothing compared the pain I feel for you.
The anger numbs my pain,
As I sit in the darkness,
carving my emotions out of me.
And if I bleed,
I bleed the hatred out,
Knowing that your never here.
How smoothly the blood runs out,
Spilling my love and anger out,
I sacrifice myself for you,
but I know you won't return,
I die in this place,
Knowing that no one cares,
I'm missing to the world,
A lost soul.
And if I bleed,
I bleed for you,
Knowing that you won't return,
I sleep and dream of you awake without me there
Author notes
This was inspired by the song "Missing" by Evanescence.
A contest entry
- Missing [Lyric Inspired] by Pisces Pieces.
1750 points, ended July 24, 2007, 12 entries
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Comments
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i like this.evanescence is one of my favorite bands so i like to hear stuff inspired by them.some parts are a bit short,but then mine are massive.
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Normally, I'm not a fan of the whole cutting thing, BUT this has a much deeper and much more meaningful appeal to it and really pulls at my emotions. It doesn't focus on the act itself, but more of what it is does to the pain.
The emotion and pain is so strong and evident in these words, I feel what you write of feeling and that is always an admirable quality in a piece for me. I think you've expressed your concepts, sentiments, and emotions very well and I enjoyed your piece as much as a sad and painful expression can be "enjoyed" (if you know what I mean).
Thank you for entering and best of luck!
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