"What breaks but never falls
and falls but never breaks?"
Day breaks,
but never falls...
kind of like my heart.
Night falls,
but never breaks...
kind of like friendships.
Day breaks but never falls,
night falls but never breaks...
kind of like life,
depending on what kind you chose.
Day breaks...
Night falls...
Author notes
Mystique
Day breaks, but never falls.
Night falls, but never breaks.
Okay, I'm not going to lie. This. Poem. Sux. Big time. Can't say I didn't warn you. I am not good at writing based on prompts though, and I REALLY wanted to answer the riddle, so I did my best.
A contest entry
- Answer me riddle and relate. by darell.
900 points, ended July 16, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thought Provoking!
A poem of profound meaning and emotion.
This was simple but deep at the same time.
I enjoyed all the metaphors as they relate
to life and the human experience.
Thanks for this lovely entry.
Best wishes in the contest -
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thnxx for the trophy, i really appreciate it!
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its a great poem dont say it sux its great
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thnxx...
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Day breaks,
but never falls...
kind of like my heart.
a tear actually jump out of my left eye when I read this part. It brought memories of someone I hold dear as if through your words I heard her speak them. ...your getting there, a little more effort and each of your lines will speak to every reader who reads or hears them. keep it simple, keep it real, ...and keep it true.
keep writing.
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Whoa!!!
This is just so amazing!!! It's unlike anything you've ever written! -
I actually think this is an amazing poem! Good job!
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beautiful!
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